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It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Technology has improved the life quality of people over the world. Many people consider that the more technology is grasped, the more cultural values are loosened; however, I truly disagree with that point and strongly believe that the coexistence of technical advancement and traditional activities is possible.

Firstly, technical and scientific progression contributes to the development of traditional culture and makes it closer to the public. Without the Internet, traditional activities only occur in specific communities via word of mouth. On the other hand, high-end technology can promote traditional values to approach different territories so that these long-lasting customs can be well known and appreciated by others; for example, social media and digital channels help to spread the Western festivals such as Christmas Eve, Thanks Giving Day to Eastern cultures.

Secondly, in reality, traditional cultures have always been maintained and preserved along with the enhancement of technology. In globalization era, the need to keep cultural identity is extremely important to easily distinguish one country from the others. Not only the countries whose culture are rich want to maintain their values but also the melting-pot, such as the United States would like to preserve the rich culture of the world by implementing several culture preservation programs. Another example of this is India, the home to the third largest number of technology driven startups in the world, is still spreading yoga, which is the country’s traditional therapist method, to the world.

In conclusion, I am of the belief that traditional cultures and modern technology can coincide. By implementing profound measures, both can support each other to bring benefits and positive influences to people.

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Firstly, technical and scientific progression contributes to the development of traditional culture and makes it closer to the public -> Progress

On the other hand, high-end technology can promote traditional values to approach different territories so that these long-lasting customs can be well known and appreciated by others; for example, social media and digital channels help to spread the Western -> . For example,

I am of the belief that-> I believe. it will be better and more common.

I see that your essay is clear but not so much persuasive and you need to make your idea in each paragraph more detailed and explanation.

Here is the link to my essay. Could u please check it for me? Thanks.

http://chuawritingmienphi.com/index.php/6236/government-invested-teaching-science-subjects-country-develop-progress-disagree

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