CHỮA LỖI WRITING TASK 1 GIÚP EM VỚI MỌI NGƯỜI ƠI ĐỪNG BƠ E

Question

Phần introduction:
The bar chart illustrates the jobless percentage of female in the four different countries of the UK in two years : 2013- 2014.It is clear that the proportion of the women's jobless increased in Scotland between 2013 - 2014 comparison with the other countries of the UK.

Answer 1

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The bar chart illustrates the jobless percentage of female [the percentage of unemployment among female labors/workers/employees] in the [bỏ the] four different countries of the UK in two years : 2013 [and] 2014. It is clear that the proportion of the women's jobless[ness] increased in Scotland between 2013 [and] 2014[,] comparison with [compared with] the [bỏ the] other countries of the UK.

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