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These days, living alone has emerged as a popular trend in modern society. This change in lifestyle has advantages and disadvantages in equal measure.

To start with, it is undenied that the increase in one-person household has brought benefits of both individual and broader economy. On an individual level, people who opt to live alone can have more self-reliant lives. Since they  must make their own decision about things ranging from having a balanced diet each day, doing housework to paying household bills and sorting out their finance. All of these are the key factors to develop necessary life skills to help them become more mature, decisive and independent people. From an economic view, this trend allows homeowners to save money from children’s services and family ones as well. Besides, estate agents and construction industry gain some profit from requirement for housing.

However, the personal and economic arguments given above can be considered from the opposite angle. First, people living alone seem to encounter the feelings of lonliness and boredome. Associated with them, anxiety is one of feelings they suffer from. Especially, under the difficult situation, they can be defeated easily because of the lack of emotional support of family and roommates. Even when they get sick, they may manage to get over illness themselves without the help of relatives and flatmates. Moreover, a rise in demand for supplying accommodation leads to push up property prices and rents. Additionally, they are likely to bear the weigh of all bills while living costs have grown considerably.

In general, besides its drawbacks, living in one-person household are well worth considering. Thus, each person should seriously think this trend over before reaching a final decision.
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These days, living alone has emerged as a popular trend in modern society. This change in lifestyle has advantages and disadvantages in equal measure.

To start with, it is undenied that the increase in one-person household has brought benefits TO both individual and broader economy. On an individual level, people who opt to live alone can have more self-reliant lives. Since they  must make their own decisionS about things ranging from having a balanced diet each day, doing housework to paying household bills and sorting out their finance. All of these are the key factors to develop necessary life skills to help them become more mature, decisive and independent people. From an economic view, this trend allows homeowners to save money from children’s services and family ones as well. Besides, estate agents and construction industry gain some profitS from requirementS for housing.

However, the personal and economic arguments given above can be considered from the opposite angle. First, people living alone seem to encounter the feelings of lonliness and boredome. Associated with them, anxiety is one of feelings they suffer from. Especially, under the difficult situationS, they can be defeated easily because of the lack of emotional support of family and roommates. Even when they get sick, they may manage to get over illness themselves without the help of relatives and flatmates. Moreover, a rise in demand for supplying accommodation leads to pushING up property prices and rents. Additionally, they are likely to bear the weighT of all bills while living costs have grown considerably.

In general, besides its drawbacks, living in one-person household are well worth considering. Thus, each person should seriously think this trend over before reaching a final decision.

 

Generally, The essay developed good ideas and was oraginzed well.

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 the increase in one-person household has brought benefits of both individual and broader economy ( has brought benefits to/ for / has been of benefit to)

Since they  must make their own decision (decisions) about things ranging from having a balanced diet each day, doing housework to paying household bills and sorting out their finance ( Câu này mình thấy có since đầu câu, thì phải là câu có 2 mệnh đề, nên mình nghĩ bỏ since đi, mình thấy dùng such as nhìn câu sẽ thoáng hơn)

All of these are the key factors to develop necessary life skills to help them become more mature, decisive and independent people ( Câu này mình ko thấy có lỗi, nhưng cái factors mình thấy chỉ là making decisions thôi, nên mình nghĩ nên sửa lại thành là this helps them have greater autonomy in their own lives(

From an economic view, this trend allows homeowners to save money from children’s services and family ones as well ( Mình thấy ideal này ko hợp lý lắm, nếu họ sống vs partner ko có con thì chi phí sẽ giảm đi nhiều)

Besides, estate agents and construction industry gain some profit ( profits) from requirement for housing ( the demand for housing)

 First , people living alone seem to encounter the feelings of lonliness and boredome. Associated with them, anxiety is one of feelings they suffer from. Especially, under the difficult situation, they can be defeated easily because of the lack of emotional support of family and roommates. Even when they get sick, they may manage to get over illness themselves without the help of relatives and flatmates (ideal này bị mất tính tổ chức vs thống nhất trong 1 đoạn mình nghĩ nên sửa như thế này sẽ hợp lý hơn: Firstly, people living alone seem to ecounter the feeling of loneliness. When faced with personal adversities, they cannot solve these by themselves. This can engender them the feeling of lack of mental support from their relatives. For example, when I had to go to hospital for treatment, I always felt alone and sad because my family could not stand with me in that time. )

Moreover, a rise in demand for supplying accommodation (the demand for accommodation) leads to push up property prices and rents

 

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These days, living alone has emerged as a popular trend in modern society. This change in lifestyle has BOTH advantages and disadvantages in equal measure.

To start with, it is UNDENIABLE that the increase in one-person household has brought benefits of both individual and broader economy. On an individual level, people who opt to live alone can have more self-reliant lives. Since they must make their own decision about things ranging from having a balanced diet each day, doing housework to paying household bills and sorting out their finance.  ̣(CÂU NÀY CHƯA HOÀN CHỈNH VÌ MỚI CÓ 1 CLAUSE THÔI: SINCE S + V, S + v). All of these are the key factors to develop necessary life skills to help them become more mature, decisive and independent people. From an economic view, this trend allows homeowners to save money from children’s services and family ones as well. Besides, estate agents and construction industry gain some profit from requirement for housing.

However, the personal and economic arguments given above can be considered from the opposite angle. First, people living alone seem to (có thể dùng ARE MORE LIKE TO) encounter (BE SUBJECTED TO) the feelings of lonliness and boredome. Associated with them, anxiety is one of THE feelings they suffer from (bỏ from vì suffer khi nói về experience sth unpleasant thì k đi kèm from [xem từ điển Oxford từ suffer mục 2). Especially, under the (bỏ the vì nói chung chung) difficult situationS, they can be EASILY defeated (chuyển vậy nghe hay hơn hoặc có thể viết là they are more VULNERABLE to frustration) because of the lack of emotional support FROM family and RELATIVES. Even when they get sick (are suffering from sicknesses), they may have to manage to get over illness (bỏ) themselves (Bỏ vì khúc without... phía sau là đủ rồi) without the help )ASSISTANCE) of relatives and flatmates. Moreover, a rise in demand for supplying accommodation leads to push pushing (LEAD TO + vING) up property prices and rents. Additionally, (Finally) they are likely to bear the weigh of all bills while living costs have grown considerably. (bạn nên consider dùm cụm "place heavy burden on.." trong câu này xem sao)

In general, besides (DESPITE) its drawbacks, living in one-person household are well worth considering. Thus, each person should seriously think this trend over (PONDER UPON) before reaching a final decision.

 

 

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