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It is undoubted that parents send their children to schools in order to have
 
a good studying environment, but in fact, some schools cannot secure it
 
because of the misbehavior of students. To tackle this problem, schools as
 
well as parents can carry out several solutions.
 
There are some problems underlying students’ behavior which need to be
 
solved. To commence with, cheating is a worth-mentioning issue at schools
 
as the examination season. If students studied hard with the teachers’ urge,
 
and teachers also supervised them closely, there would not be this case
 
now. Moreover, they may have a tendency to rely on others, and likely fail
 
in the future life. Another significant problem is that some students usually
 
use violence as a key to resolve; as a result, it has a bad effect on school’s
 
honor and/or physical and spritual victims. In fact, at some public schools
 
in Vietnam, this phenomenon has happened frequently due to the lack of
 
parents and teachers’ care.
 
However, these suggestions below can be implemented to reduce this
 
situation.
 
First of all, to deal with cheating, schools should establish stricter rules and
 
punishments with the aim of forcing them to obey.In additon, school can
 
requires teachers to monitor students carefullly and advise them to study.
 
Secondly,in terms of violent behavior, in my opinion, schools had better
 
increase more morality lessons, and at home, parents can also educate their
 
children. If this situation is still unchanged, schools could punish them
 
more heavily such as suspension or even expulsion.
 
In conclusion, I believe that students’behavior can be improved if schools
 
and parents never stop looking for appropriate measures and teaching
 
these patiently.
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- theo mình nghĩ, bài này viết hơi giống tiếng việt, kiểu như dịch từ tiếng việt sang vậy, 

Secondly,in terms of violent behavior, in my opinion, câu này hơi dài dòng, nên bỏ đi cái in my opinion thì hay hơn.

However, these suggestions below can be implemented to reduce this situation. câu này dùng từ reduce k hợp lắm, dùng improve đc hơn

 

 schools should establish stricter rules and punishments with the aim of forcing them to obey. câu này bị lỗi nghĩa rồi vì mình nghĩ mục đích cuối cùng phải là gì chứ k phải là tuân theo thôi. 

 

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góp ý tí về chỗ này it has a bad effect on school’s

 
honor and/or physical 
nên dùng bad effects vì ảnh hưởng không chỉ có một và không viết kiểu and/or trong bài viết
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