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Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

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Some people argues that authorities should forbid people from taking part in dangerous sports, whereas others suggest that everyone should be free to do any physical activities. In this essay, i'll discuss both of these ideas and give my own opinion.

Personally, I adhere to the latter idea that people should have freedom to do any sports. Firstly, people choose to join these sports for their passions and for a relief of stresses from work. For instance, when one is parachuting, he will feel some kinds of refreshment and entertainment and get rid of strains of daily life. Secondly, these hazardous sports provide professional athletes with money and fames as well. Annually, top sportsmen benefit a large sum of money from the contests of these sports. Moreover, these sports supply people with employment for constructing facilities or safety supervision during the contests.

These dangerous sports, howerver, also have drawbacks. The contestants of these sports are more likely to be injured. Any mistake may lead to serious injuries for the athletes which involve various severe disabilities or even probably kill them. Furthermore, not only the athletes but also the spectators can be injured in the contests. In a motor race, for example, if a racer fall over, his motor might dash into the spectators and hurt them.

In conclusion, while I agree that the dangerous sports have their disadvantages, I still believe that the government should not ban these sports but require strict supervisions for safety of the contestants.

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Dangerous sports has long been a controversial problems in many nations. Some people think those risky sports deserve to be forbidden by laws while others assert that people should have the right to do any sports or activity. In this essay, i will discuss both of these views and give my opinion.

Personally, i would allow people to do any sports or activity rather than prevent them from taking part in it. First of all, if passed, the laws banning perilous sports will be faced with strong objection from many people, including employees working in dangerous sport zones and citizens who love playing these risky sports. This would lead to some protests against the goverments and thus result in tense situations. Secondly, helping people to build their heath and realease the pressure, dangerous sports deserve the consideration of goverments to be permitted. Skydiving, motor racing or boxing are very popular today and it is very clear that anyone taking part in those activity for a time have a good heath. Furthermore, the thrilling and exciting feelings of dangerous sports immidiately make people’s stresses vanish.

However, these dangerous sports have adverse effects as well. Foremost, the number of dead and injured people is confirmed to increase annually. The news about someone break their legs by falling out of horses or accidentally hit another’s car in a race are no surprises at this time. Beside that, dangerous sports encourage children to try it at home or school. For example, inspiring by famous wrestlers on TV, many kids attempt to perform their favourite characters’ moves and in some case, harm themselves or their friends.

To sum up, although dangerous sports are still be criticized, i think the goverment should not ban those risky sports and instead, require the people taking part in dangerous sport-related businesses to ensure their customers’ safety and limit other unfavourable effects.

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Dangerous sports has ( have) long been a (ko có “a”) controversial problems in many nations. Some people think those risky sports deserve to be forbidden by laws while others assert that people should have the right to do any sports or activity. In this essay, i will discuss both of these views and give my opinion.

Personally, i would allow people to do any sports or activity rather than prevent them from taking part in it (them). First of all, if passed, the laws banning perilous sports will be faced (face) with strong objection from many people, including employees working in dangerous sport zones and citizens who love playing these risky sports. This would lead to some protests against the goverments and thus result in tense situations. Secondly, helping people to build their heath and realease the pressure, dangerous sports deserve the consideration of goverments to be permitted. Skydiving, motor racing or boxing are very popular today and it is very clear that anyone taking part in those activity for a time (ko có “a” hoặc a period of time) have a good heath. Furthermore, the thrilling and exciting feelings of dangerous sports immidiately (immediately) make people’s stresses vanish.

However, these dangerous sports have adverse effects as well. Foremost, the number of dead and injured people is confirmed to increase annually. The news about someone break (breaking) their legs by falling out of horses or accidentally hit (hitting) another’s car in a race are no surprises at this time. Beside that, dangerous sports encourage children to try it (them) at home or school. For example, inspiring (inspired) by famous wrestlers on TV, many kids attempt to perform their favourite characters’ moves and in some case, harm themselves or their friends.

To sum up, although dangerous sports are still be criticized, i think the goverment should not ban those risky sports and instead, require the people taking part in ( mk nghĩ nên bỏ chỗ này đi) dangerous sport-related businesses to ensure their customers’ safety and limit other unfavourable effects.
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Sports have been a part of human beings for very long time. Beside some regular sports which played widely and competed in Olympic Games such as soccer, swimming, basketball or more, dangerous sports has appeared and developed significantly. Critics argue that those sports should be prohibited while others agree players are able to take part in dangerous activities because of their freedom and own opinion.

Dangerous sports are still being supported despite the unprecedented consequences. It has to be said that people have their rights to follow their hobbies, which contain risky activities. In many locations, groups of players are increasingly joining in some games, falling from the sky from a helicopter or jump from the bridge for examples, enthusiastically. Those games are believed to encourage the players’ braveness and to discover new limitation both emotionally and physically. In fact, there are more and more people, especially the young, finding those challenges interesting.

However, the perilous entertainment contains some reasons that can negatively affect individuals as well as the society. Firstly, they are so dangerous that cause unpredictable outcomes. Severe injuries can threaten players that cost them painfully long time to recover or even more seriously, the death could come. Secondly, the expenditure for the unsafe activities is certainly high. Unique clothes or playing equipment are necessary to protect them from danger, but their prices may be tricky to be afforded. And lastly, in social perspective, parents cannot stay calm when they know their children are participating in the high risky games.

In my opinion, the governments and authorities do not need to prevent people from playing dangerous games because of their special passion. Instead, they should control people playing by explicit regulations to keep them safe.

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Sport have been a part of human's life for thoundand of years. Nowadays, many kinds of sport emerged due to the rapid development of human being. However, it causes an controversial issue : whether extreme sports should be forbidden or should be freely participated for everyone. On this essay, I will discuss both opinions.
   From my point of view, I agree with the first view because of the benefit those sports bring about. Firstly, it is undeniable that challenges and obstacles are part of our life. If we conquer the challenges and obstacles which come from dangerous sports, our sefl-esteem and belief will be reinforced remarkably. Furthermore, we can benefit wonderful feelings from extreme sports which is hardly appeared in sedentary life. Besides, security equipments help us a lots, protect us from unexpected injuries or even death. Therefore, we dont have to worry about injuries.
   However, People still argue that extreme sports are dangerous though participants have security equipments to lessen the risk. Thoundsand of people have lost their life annually as they took part in dangerous sports like parachuting, mountain climbing or wave surfing. Moreover, If injuries occur, they will be extremely serious because of the high level of risk. Another reason contribute to this view is that there are number of sports which are soft, easy to play and suit to everyone. For instance, man can choose football, voleyball or badminton. Women should choose aerobic and the ideal option for elderly people is chess.
     In conclusion, personally, I think government should not prohibit citizens from extreme sports. Instead, the supervision should be more strict and security equipments should be used widely.
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Many nowadays argue for the ban of dangerous sports, while others claim that they should be given more liberty to take pleasure in any activites or sports that they like. I will discuss both of the views and later on give my own opinion.

On the one hand, dangerous sports are beneficial in many ways. Firstly, it is a way to release stress and become more active in your life. Many people nowadays claim that they are overwhelmed and stressed by the pressure in their work. So consequently, taking part in these perilous activities will have such cathartic effects to alleviate those pressure. Secondly, dangerous sports like boxing or car racing can bring great excitement for audience and also can bring a lot of fame and wealth for many athletes. This will not only help to bring entertainment to viewers but also solve a huge problem of unemployment for many governments, therefore reducing the crime rates in many areas.

On the other hand, these risky sports also pose a lot of polemical problems. The first thing is safety issues. Due to the high amount of risk involved in many of these sports, there's a huge chance that it would cause major injuries or even death. Secondly, since governments cannot control all these activities, many specialized facilities or equipments aren't sufficiently provided, therefore will lead to dangerous situations.

In conclusion, while dangerous sports activities reveal many problems, it shouldn't be prohibited. Instead, governments and other policy makers should encourage people to participate in those sports and also publish more safety regulations to minimize perilous situations.
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Mong mn góp ý giùm mình !!!

It is true that there still remains some sports can put you at risk or even death.While some people advocate the losing popularity of these sports , I personally believe that people have inalienable rights to enjoy whatever kind of sports they take interest in.

 

It is undeniable that involving ourselves in insecure activities may be the cause of injuries,or even more serious,is death.Even if you are lucky to escape it, you may suffer from a detrimental effect on your health as a result of getting into a state of panic or being overexcited.A good example for this is,evidently shown, the minority of people have a heart disease,though,feel fascinated by enjoying extreme sports will surely bear the pain brought by their illnesses.

 

On the other hand,individuals are given greater autonomy in leisure activities.Moreover,  the option to experience sports involve risky actions sounds attractive to anyone of us.Firstly, many people find it interesting to have a flutter from extreme sports.Secondly, by taking these challenging steps can make yourself braver in tackling problems in reality. For instance, when you courageously do a bungee jump while others seem frightened of what you are doing, it is such a good chance to show that you can easily take part in any daring activies and also to prove you are able to face the problems with practical skills you have learned from dangerous sports.

 

By way of conclusion, I reiterate the point made in this essay that extreme sports are created for people entertainmet as of right as long as we can ensure our safety

 

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