Task 2: Technology is becoming increasingly prevalent in the world today. Giving time, technology will completely replace the teacher in the classroom. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Question

In recently, technology becomes more convenient in social activities than in the past. The computer is using a huge number in the bank and education, office. I will agree of statement the technology can be less importance of teacher in the classroom but it does not ignore the role of teacher. I shall give ideas and examples in this essay.

In addition, a growing number of people argue that technology is useful in education systems. They claim that using computer in the classroom will bring modern methodologies and comfortable environment with students who are more creativity and very talent in present which student in the past less than. We would use technology for preparing lecture book and power point and made material for the lesson such as video and training information, giving exercises. Beside, students can do a lot of exercises by software on computer if the subjects have that one and present seminar for the class. Students and teacher can find the data and relevant material. Application technology in the classroom is developing skills in the present and in the future.

In marked contrast, many people argue that the role of teacher in classroom is very importance forever and cannot jump while any circumstance of education systems. They feel that a bit of teacher situation in the classroom is a vast important to student. Teacher trains attitude to student and soft skills which have meaning for any people when they are studying in the school, yet technology never done. And if technology wants to work, it will need teacher to do on this one. Thus, teachers are always imitation for student who wants to become that situation. We have never deleted the role of teacher since we had social.

In conclusion, the role of teacher and technology should be used parallel in education systems which bring diversities methodologies for us. We could not jump over the role of teacher when we study at the school.

(320 words)

Answer 1

Ban dung qua nhieu template khong chinh xac ve mat ngu phap. Vi du: In recently, In marked constrast.

Day la 1 bai viet academic, ban nen han che su dung cac pronoun ngoi thu 1 nhu "I", "we".

Mot so cau truc ngu phap cua ban khong sai, nhung rat toi nghia; dac biet la cac cau truc ve so sanh comparative hoac parallel. Ban nen hoc cach paraphrase tot hon, vi du: "In recently, technology becomes more convenient in social activities than in the past" co the dan toi hieu nham rang ban dang so sanh in social activities voi in the past, do doan "in recently" dat dau cau.

Cac paragraph cua ban co do coherence thap do nhieu cau thua, va y chua ro. Vi du cau cuoi cung cua paragraph 3 khong an khop voi cac cau tren.

Tu vung cua ban theo minh la tuong doi ok. 

 

Answer 2

In recent years, technology has become more commonplace in social activities than in the past. The computer is used in huge numbers in banks, education, and offices. I will agree to the statement that technology can lessen the importance of teacher in the classroom but it does not ignore the role of teacher completely. I shall give ideas and examples in this essay.

A growing number of people argue that technology is useful in education systems. They claim that using computers in the classroom will bring modern methodologies and a comfortable environment for students who are more creative and talented than students of the past were. We would use technology for preparing lecture books and Power Point presentations, in creating materials for the lesson such as video and training information,, and in giving exercises. Besides, students can do a lot of exercises related to theoretical lessons via software on the computer. Students and teachers can find the data and relevant material. Application technology in the classroom helps to develop skills in the present and in the future.

In marked contrast, many people argue that the role of the teacher in classrooms is very important, and  under no education system to be replaced. They feel that teacher interaction in the classroom is of vast importancet to students. Teachers train the attitudes of students and teach soft skills, which are important for people when they are studying in the school, yet technology cannot teach this. And for technology to work, it will need a teacher to operate it.  We have never removed the role of teachers since we had formal education in place.

In conclusion, the role of teacher and technology should be used together in education systems, which bring diverse methodologies for us. We should not ignore the role of teacher when we study at school.

Góp ý:

Bài viết mắc lỗi nghiêm trọng trong cách diễn đạt, vì vậy từ vựng dùng không đúng trong ngữ cảnh và dùng sai ngữ pháp. Câu văn còn dài dòng, không diễn đạt được ý chính. Vì vậy, để tránh câu văn dài dòng, có thể kết hợp những câu ngắn, mệnh đề quan hệ, cụm danh từ, cụm động từ,… để diễn đạt.

Chú ý việc sử dụng từ vựng, đặc biệt cách dùng tính từ và danh từ. E.g: the role of the teacher in the class is important/ The role of the teacher in the class is of importance.

 

 

Answer 3

Application technology in the classroom is developing skills in the present and in the future. Theo mình nghĩ nên là has been developing.

In recently, technology becomes more convenient in social activities than in the past. The computer is using a huge number in the bank and education, office. I will agree of statement the technology can be less importance of teacher in the classroom but it does not ignore the role of teacher. I shall give ideas and examples in this essay. Bạn nên viết : Giving ideals and examples will show this opinion.

Examples???