In recent years, we have witnessed a significant breakthrough in technological advances which have changed our lives considerably. However, it is thought that technology leads too (to) complicated life and we should remove those advances ( + to )solve this problem. From my perspective, I partly disagree with that statement and will give my reasons below:
First of all, it is undeniable that the appearance of groundbreaking advances brings us plenty of benefits as well as simplify our lives in some daily duties. For instance, thanks to the technology robotics development, instead of spending our quality time doing household chores, we can set up a particular program for robots that can do multiple tasks all at the same time. Besides, using social network websites allow us to keep in contact with our distant relatives with only an internet-connected smartphone. In the past, if we wanted to catch up with the latest blockbuster movies, we had to go to the cinema, but now, we just need to have access to the Internet and watch online. In some reasons, I suppose technological breakthrough has helped us lead a simpler and more convenient life by providing us with opportunities to do our favorite activities.
On the other hand, using competently electronic devices is considered as real rocket science with the elderly who hasn’t had a variety of chances to approach technology. Besides, it can be seen that the Internet development has resulted in a new kind of criminals – cybercrime and many violent scenes and age-inappropriate contents from informal websites have influenced negatively on children’s awareness. Because of available electronic devices, people intend to spend their high time being glued to the digital screen instead of taking part in social activities or talking to their beloved ones. Moreover, even within walking distance, they still choose to chat with others through social networks such as Facebook, Twitter, or Instagram…rather than spending just a little time on a face-to-face meeting. Consequently, sedentary lifestyles have become more and more prevalent and severe.
In conclusion, technological tools (theo minh thấy thì development sẽ hơn trong trường hợp này) make your lives more complicated but their appearance also leads to convenience and modernity which provide us a better quality of the life (mình thấy câu này hơi lủng củng và khó hiểu) .Without technological advances, I suppose, even other activities in manufacturing jobs would be influenced negatively and get stuck with some stages.
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