ip.chuawriting
Post bài mới

Lưu ý: Check bài viết với Grammarly trước để tránh lỗi đơn giản! Click banner dưới đây để check


Chúng mình đang tuyển CTV chữa bài CÓ TRẢ PHÍ - các bạn có thể apply ở đây: "https://forms.gle/cpVjgt2TggRyVckHA"
Website Chuawritingmienphi là forum chữa bài miễn phí, được chữa từ chính cộng đồng học IELTS.
Các bạn xem bài chữa mẫu tại "http://bit.ly/baichuaW-demo"
Đối với các bài chữa thiếu nghiêm túc sẽ được kiểm duyệt và BAN tài khoản của học viên đó.
Bắt đầu nhận xét ở mục "Bài chưa có góp ý" để bắt đầu kiếm point nhé :)

3.7k Bài viết

4.9k Góp ý

2.5k bình luận

110k thành viên

Nowadays, there is a increasing number of juvenile and aldolescent who prefer staying at home to going outside. this phenomenon can result in serious problems, which can be tackled using appropriate measures.

It is possibly said that this issue may be caused by some main factors. One of the prominent reasons concerning this problem is the development of the Internet. In the modern world, the advance in teachnology has allowed people to do anything remotely such as: shopping, chatting, etc. Therefore, instead of going out for goods and equipment, citizens nowadays tend to order online, which is usually cheaper and more convenient.  According to statistics, about 40 million Vietnamese people go shopping online every day because of its benefits. Another factor leading to this situation is the inactive lifestyle of some teenager. In this day and age, students spend most of their time studying, as a result, they become sedentacy. Consequently, after a hard day of work, people favor playing game or sleeping instead of taking exercises.

In truth, some imperative measures ought to be taken to resolve these prospective issues. Firstly, School should focus more on making extracurrlicurlar events for students to take part in. These activity could also help pupils from being stressed and depressed. Additionally, being the most important persons to a development of a child, parents should spend more time with their children. It is crucial that parents take their kids to social places for them to play and improve their social skills. This do good for not only the child, but also the adocelents. If these two actions are taken into account, I strongly believe that it will decline the rate of people staying at home.

In conclusion, there are indeed many repercussion of teenagers and adocelents spending time indoors nowadays, yet, they can be solved once according measures are enlisted imperatively.

Theo bạn, bài viết này được bao nhiêu "chấm" ?
đã hỏi trong Problem-Solution bởi (13 điểm)
share bài về Wall để xem lại ===>

Xin vui lòng đăng nhập hoặc đăng ký để góp ý bài viết này.

1 góp ý

0 phiếu

Nowadays, there is a increasing number of juvenile and aldolescent who prefer staying at home to going outside. this phenomenon can result in serious problems, which can be tackled using appropriate measures.

It is possibly said that this issue may be caused by some main factors. One of the prominent reasons concerning this problem is the development of the Internet. In the modern world, the advance in teachnology has allowed people to do anything remotely such as: shopping, chatting, etc. Therefore, instead of going out for goods and equipment, citizens nowadays tend to order online, which is usually cheaper and more convenient.  According to statistics, about 40 million Vietnamese people go shopping online every day because of its benefits. Another factor leading to this situation is the inactive lifestyle of some teenager=> teenagers. In this day and age, students spend most of their time studying, as a result, they become sedentacy. Consequently, after a hard day of work, people favor playing game or sleeping instead of taking exercises.

In truth, some imperative measures ought to be taken to resolve these prospective issues. Firstly, School should focus more on making extracurrlicurlar events for students to take part in. These activity=> activities could also help pupils from being stressed and depressed. Additionally, being the most important persons=> factors/people to a development of a child, parents should spend more time with their children. It is crucial that parents take their kids to social places for them to play and improve their social skills. This do good for not only the child, but also the adocelents. If these two actions are taken into account, I strongly believe that it will decline the rate of people staying at home.

In conclusion, there are indeed many repercussion of teenagers and adocelents spending time indoors nowadays, yet, they can be solved once according measures are enlisted imperatively

Theo bạn, bài viết này được bao nhiêu "chấm" ?
đã góp ý cách đây bởi (6 điểm)

Update: Từ 30/4 Điểm bạn tích lũy được trên CWMP sẽ dùng để đổi quà (vé xem CGV (100 điểm/1 vé, thẻ cào điện thoại 150 điểm/thẻ 50k, khóa học IELTS Online (300 điểm/khóa 3 tháng)
Đăng ký quy đổi điểm tại: Form đổi điểm lấy quà"

Bắt đầu nhận xét ở mục "Bài chưa có góp ý" để bắt đầu kiếm Điểm nhé :)

Tham khảo các bài viết tương tự

...