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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvatages?

These days, some countries are experiencing an ageing population, while others such as in South East Asia own a considerably huge number of young people. In term of economy and society, I firmly believe that this situation brings a lot of advantages to the whole nation rather than its drawbacks.

To begin with, people at working age accounting for the largest proportion of the total population would provide an abundant labour force for any country. In addition, young people are creative and have fresh minds, they often create some breakthrough developments which enable their country to thrive. With high productivity at work, youth is the strongest supporter of the nation's gross domestic product.
For example, Vietnam's GDP has been proliferating significantly due to their golden population structure. Moreover, this country also possesses high foreign investment from others because of the young active workforce.
Furthermore, young people often have strong physical and mental health. Therefore, they do not put the heavy pressure on the healthcare system like the elderly. This means the government could use the national budget to allocate to other paramount sectors.  Finally, with their strength and creativity, they devote a lot of energy to their work and earn the highest remuneration in the family, thus, they are often the breadwinners who take care of children and older people. Let's take Korea as an example, Korean youth works for 12 hours a day and they are one of the most important factors to foster Korea's economic growth and caring for their family.
In conclusion, although there are some disadvantages a country may encounter when owing a young population, it seems to me that this would be beneficial more to the nation's economy and the society as a whole.
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These days, some countries are experiencing an ageing population, while others such as in South East Asia own a considerably huge number of young people. In term of economy and society, I firmly believe that this situation brings a lot of advantages to the whole nation rather than its drawbacks.

To begin with, people at working age accounting for the largest proportion of the total population would provide an abundant labour force --> abundant workforce for any country. In addition, young people are creative and have fresh minds, they often create some breakthrough developments which enable their country to thrive. With high productivity at -->  in work, youth --> the young is the strongest supporter of the nation's gross domestic product.  -->  The youngs are the main workforce contribute to the increase of the nation’s gross domestic product. For example, Vietnam's GDP has been proliferating significantly due to their golden population structure. Moreover, this country also possesses high foreign investment from others because of the young active workforce.

 

Furthermore, young people often have strong physical and mental health. Therefore, they do not put the heavy pressure on the healthcare system like the elderly. This means the government could use the national budget to allocate to other paramount sectors.  Finally, with their strength and creativity, they devote a lot of energy to their works and earn the highest remuneration in the family, thus, they are often the breadwinners who take care of children and older people. Let's take Korea as an example, --> For instance, Korean youth works for 12 hours a day and they are one of the most important factors to foster Korea's economic growth and caring for their family.

 

In conclusion, although there are some disadvantagesa country  -->  some countries may encounter when owing a young population, it seems to me that this would be beneficial more -->  more beneficial to the nation's economies and the societies as a whole.

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