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 In some nations, the moderate weight of individuals is rising, but their scales of health and fitness are reducing. This essay will discuss a variety of reasons as well as solutions associated with such serious problems.

 

 There are various factors leading to increasing people's average weight and decreasing their health and fitness. First and foremost, it is a sedentary lifestyle. Due to the development of technology such as smartphones, tablets, and so on; people have a tendency to overuse them for recreation and stay in their seat. As a result, users lack physical activities and gain weight. In addition, Covid-19 pandemic also prevents outdoor activities and keeps people sheltering in place, which makes the issue harder to overcome. Another reason is a huge load of work. In this day and age, the cost of living demands people to deal with an enormous bunch of tasks; and workers are in lack of time for slap-up meals or doing workout. 

 

 While these issues have posed a threat to public health, the government’s decisive action is in need. Spearheading an online campaign related to healthy style of living as keep-fit exercises at home, let’s be a green finger, or stretching-challenge will not only heighten people’s awareness of the benefits of doing exercise, but also help them kick the bad habits. Moreover, every single individual ought to juggle the schedule. Apparently, striking a balance between work and daily routine is necessary; which lifts your mood and leads to a healthier lifestyle. Besides, going on a diet is also highly recommended; in that it makes a habit of good eating for people of every age.

 

 All in all, facing a variety of factors causing rising people's moderate weight and reducing their health and fitness, the government and every individual need to take action seriously for tackling the health problems. It is not only for our world, it is our responsibility for the future generation.

 
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  In some nations, the moderate weight of individuals is rising, but their scales of health and fitness are reducing. This essay will discuss a variety of reasons as well as solutions associated with such serious problems.
 
  There are various factors leading to increasing people's average weight and decreasing their health and fitness. First and foremost, it is a sedentary lifestyle. Due to the development of technology such as smartphones, tablets, and so on; people have a tendency to overuse them for recreation and stay in their seat --> seats. As a result, users lack physical activities and gain weight. In addition, the Covid-19 pandemic also prevents outdoor activities and keeps people sheltering in place, which makes the issue harder to overcome. Another reason is a huge load of work. In this day and age, the cost of living demands people to deal with an enormous bunch of tasks; and workers are in lack of time for slap-up meals or doing workout. 
 
  While these issues have posed a threat to public health, the government’s decisive action is in need. Spearheading an online campaign related to a healthy style of living as keep-fit exercises at home, let’s be a green finger, or stretching-challenge will not only heighten people’s awareness of the benefits of doing exercise, but also help them kick --> get rid of the bad habits. Moreover, every single individual ought to juggle the schedule. Apparently, striking a balance between work and daily routine is necessary; which lifts your mood and leads to a healthier lifestyle. Besides, going on a diet is also highly recommended; in that way it makes a habit of good eating for people of every age.
 
  All in all, facing a variety of factors causing rising people's moderate weight and reducing their health and fitness, the government and every individual need to take action seriously for tackling the health problems. It is not only for our world --> our healthier life, but it is also our responsibility for the future generation.
 
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