Nowadays, many parents are encouraging their children to use the computer from an early age. However, I disagree with the idea that children should be allowed to use them too soon for some reasons. Firstly, if children use the computer too much, their health will be damaged. The light from the screen of the computer is harmful to children's eyes and they will catch some diseases such as myopia, obesity, digestive disorders,...Besides, children can access the websites which have insecure information. Nowadays, cybercrimes are very dangerous and their personal information can be stolen. Moreover, children can be addicted if they use the computer too much. This will be harmful to their health, their study and their relations. In conclusion, computer is the greatest invention of human but it still has some drawbacks that I think children should not be allowed to use them too much.
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