Some people believe that school children should learn some practical working skills instead of the traditional subjects at school. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Question

Nowadays, studying at school is consider to be vital for young generation but there would be much emphasis on academic subjects and working rather than widening the workplace skills in many schools. In my view point, the students should be educated extremely to be aware of the world of employ and get some work experience as part of their education.

There are several reasons why children need to gain the knowledge of real work. Firstly, communication, team-working and project management is built into the fabric of education system which helps pupils more employable when searching for job. Secondly, seeking out work experience during their study will perfect the curriculum vitae that may impress a recruiter. Finally, they are able to see what certain types of job entail at close range which enable them to make an informed choice about their plans for the future.

Besides, academic subjects that make children have a deep sight in theoretical knowledge are so boring and irrelevant to their lives; therefore reducing working-time of them is very necessary. Currently, the recruitment process focuses on the wider skills, attitudes and behaviors at work as opposed to great grades at school. Having high qualifications will always be assets if the young are able to adapt quickly to the expectations of their employer. Furthermore, it is argued that academic subjects is just beneficial to learn for getting a good certification as a stepping stone to the reputation university or the successful career.

In conclusion, practical knowledge helps schoolchildren obtain the specific skills through the reality of life which sits much closer to their actual work, but that doesn't mean the academic knowledge is not essential for them.

 

Answer 1

Đầu tiên thì mình là một người mới tự học IELTS thôi nên mình vào đây để tham khảo bài writing của mọi người cũng như tự chỉnh sửa cho mình. Do mới tự học nên mình cũng không có vững về kiến thức cho lắm, không dám đánh giá gì nhiều. Mình thấy bài của bạn ok ở chỗ có sử dụng câu bị động. Số lượng từ cũng đủ. Từ vựng bạn sử dụng cũng tốt (ít nhất là tốt hơn mình). Nhưng mà mình thắc mà là có thể đổi từ "working-time" (therefore reducing working-time of them is very necessary) thành "studying-time" được không nhỉ? Tại vì mình nghĩ chỗ đó bạn đang nói về việc giảm thời gian học nên chữ "study" sẽ hợp lý hơn nhỉ? Mình chỉ hỏi vậy thôi, không dám ý kiến gì nhiều. Cảm ơn vì đã đọc.

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