Advantages and disadvantages of internet

Question

Nowadays, because of the demand, various people using the internet. It is becoming a dispensable part of our life in this world. This helps us be closer and more friendly. So what is the internet? The internet is a system includes connected computers to help us access all information in the world in a fast and effective way. But besides that, it also has negative points. So, I will analyze the advantages and disadvantages specifically.

First, the internet makes the connection. The internet may help you connect and contact with co-workers, friends, and relatives through social media like Facebook, Twitter and etc. Due to the internet, you can interact with everyone in the world and from that, you can build a worthy relationship. 

Secondly, it is a huge knowledge base. It helps us find information easily and quickly whether it is old or new. You can search for an issue you interested in by searching on Google. You'll find many webs contain related information.

Thirdly, it's an ideal business environment. Currently, there are also many forms for you to do online sales such as. Another advantage is the Internet also plays a very important role in the field of education and training. You can study online or train distance through the Internet. It saves you a lot of time or can be easily exchanged online with teachers when there are questions that need to be answered.

On the other hand, the internet also has drawbacks. People especially teenager are easily involved in computer games. They take so much time to sit in front of the screen to play games. This doesn't only affect their health but it also decreases the amount of money which their parents earn by hard works. They can't understand that money doesn't grow on a tree. Moreover, the internet prevents them from taking part in outdoor activities because of the internet's attraction. This will slow down social skills and cause them in confidence.

 

In a word, the internet is one of the most wonderful inventions in the world. However, it also causes troubles in our life. Thus, we should use it in moderate 

 

Answer 1

- Trong IELTS writting thì không nên đặt ra câu hỏi: So what is the internet?

- Introduction: Đưa ra background of topic rồi vào thẳng vấn đề là bài viết sẽ thảo luận về pros and cons of the internet.

- Đưa ra main idea trước như: On one hand, the internet brings users three main advantages. First of all, ....

-  Due to the internet, you can interact with everyone in the world and from that, you can build a worthy relationship --> Run on sentence

- Ở đề này nên đưa ra quan điểm một cách khách quan vì vậy nên tránh I, You

- On the other hand, the internet also has drawbacks. People especially teenager are easily involved in computer games. They take so much time to sit in front of the screen to play games. This doesn't only affect their health but it also decreases the amount of money which their parents earn by hard works. They can't understand that money doesn't grow on a tree. Moreover, the internet prevents them from taking part in outdoor activities because of the internet's attraction. This will slow down social skills and cause them in confidence.

--> Không rõ main idea vì k có từ chuyển ý

- Kết bài nên tóm tắt lại các ý đã đưa ra, k nên đưa thêm ý mới