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There is some debate that to what degree are famous musician or athlete born with natural talents or it could be trained to become successful ones. I’m going to shed some lights in both points of view and extend my partial support to the former view.

It appears to me that inherent talent plays an important role in training progress to become a successful person in sport and artist.  According to a scientific research, gene contributes 50% in practicing of a trainer. For instance, athlete who get physical ability can endure virtually high intensive process than normal person and also evolve rapidly after the same period of time. It is by all means that artist such as singer, actor, actress nearly need to innate talent in order to start the interest in this area. Singer needs excellent voice, artist need emotion of drawing and actor needs soulful eyes. All of them couldn’t be taught or practiced, that is natural.

Conversely, It’s struggle to get remarkable progress and achievement whether people don’t try their best. 70% of feat are due to a hard training and patience. Although you were born with talent, you can’t get to the final stage of career if you don’t practice. Nothing is impossible when people reach their limits so that never give up despite the later beginning. Humble starter sometimes can emerge than inherent genius

To conclude, Genius is not only natural-born talent, but also need willing to reach to the top of life known as long endurance. However, it is more effortless for natural ability to become distinguished features.
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There is some debate that to what degree are famous musician are a famous musician, are famous musicians or athlete born with natural talents or it could be trained to become successful ones. I’m going to shed some lights in both points of view and extend my partial support to the former view.


It appears to me that inherent talent plays an important role in training progress to become a successful person in sport and artist.  According to a scientific research, gene contributes 50% in practicing of a trainer. For instance, athlete who get physical ability can endure virtually high intensive process than normal person a person/ a normal person and also evolve rapidly after the same period of time period It is by all means that artist such as singer, actor, actress nearly need to innate talent in order to start the interest in this area. Singer needs excellent voice, artist need emotion of drawing and actor needs soulful eyes. All of them couldn’t be taught or practiced, that is natural.

Conversely, It’s struggle It struggles to get remarkable progress and achievement whether people don’t try their best. 70% of feat are due to a hard training and patience. Although you were born with talent, you can’t get to the final stage of career if you don’t practice. Nothing is impossible when people reach their limits so that never give up despite the later beginning. Humble starter Humble starters/ a humble starter  sometimes can emerge than inherent genius

To conclude, Genius is not only natural-born talent, but also need willing to reach to the top of life known as long endurance. However, it is more effortless for natural ability to become distinguished features.

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