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TOPIC task 2 ngày 18/07/2019:

People say that reading for pleasure helps people to develop imagination and better language skills than watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that imagination and language skills can be enhanced by reading materials rather than watching TV. From my perspective, it is partly true that reading books helps us to have a vivid imagination, however, watching TV programs also improves pronunciation and listening skills significantly.

 

On the one hand, it cannot be denied that reading for pleasure is designed to stimulate our imagination strongly. In lieu of watching TV with specific pictures and sounds, reading requires book-lovers to build up images with colors and materials themselves by words of description. Thus, it is vital that parents should read fairy tales for children to develop their lively mind and encourage their creativity in the future. Watching videos with all animations available, however, might shape children’s thoughts fixedly about an object or a phenomenon, leading to one-track mind. 

 

On the other hand, watching TV is believed to be  the most natural and effective way for beginners to improve pronunciation and listening skills by imitating stress and intonation. If reading provides students with a wide range of vocabulary and writing manners, watching shows and repeating speeches can be considered a beneficial way to practice and put new words in context. Furthermore, to children below five, watching is a more active method to acknowledge as they cannot read without parents’ supports. For instance, children are encouraged to watch Harry Potter movies first and then read books later with parents to learn new words.

 

In conclusion, reading and watching have their own merits in developing individual’s abilities. Whereas people show their preference for reading because of inspiring imagination, I also believe that watching TV is an effective method to upgrade language skills.

 
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It is argued that imagination and language skills can be enhanced by reading materials rather than watching TV. From my perspective, it is partly true that reading books helps us to have a vivid imagination, however, watching TV programs also improves pronunciation and listening skills significantly.

 

On the one hand, it cannot be denied that reading for pleasure is designed to stimulate our imagination strongly. In lieu of watching TV with specific pictures and sounds, reading requires book-lovers to build up images with colors and materials themselves by words of description. Thus, it is vital that parents should [DN1] read fairy tales for children to develop their lively mind and encourage their creativity in the future. Watching videos with all animations available, however, might shape children’s thoughts fixedly about an object or a phenomenon, leading to one-track mind passive thinking tendency

 

On the other hand, watching TV is believed to be the most natural and effective way for beginners to improve pronunciation and listening skills by imitating stress and intonation. If reading provides students with a wide range of vocabulary and writing manners, watching shows and repeating speeches can be considered a beneficial way to practice proper usage of the word and put new words in context. Furthermore, to children below five, watching is a more active method to acknowledge as they cannot read without parents’ supports. For instance, children are encouraged to watch Harry Potter movies first and then read books later with parents to build up their vocabulary learn new words.

 

In conclusion, reading and watching have their own merits in developing individual’s abilities. Whereas people show their preference for reading because of inspiring imagination, I also believe that watching TV is an effective method to upgrade language skills.

 


 [DN1]Grammar mistake: Đã dùng vital rồi không dùng should ở đây nữa


CRITERIA

GRADE

COMMENT

Task Achievement

        7

• addresses all parts of the task

• presents a relevant position

• presents relevant main ideas

Coherence and Cohesion

7

• arranges information and ideas coherently and there is a
clear overall progression
• uses paragraphing, but not always logically

Lexical Resource

6

• uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task
• attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some
inaccuracy
• makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation, but
they do not impede communication

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6

• uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms
• makes some errors in grammar and punctuation but they
rarely reduce communication

Overall

       6.5

                            

 

 

   

 

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Some people believe that people who spend time reading novels have fostered their imagination as well as improved their skills in terms of language than those watching TV. I totally agree with the statement because of the benefits of reading has helped a myriad of people .

The first reason  why I believe reading has developed artistry, is because all of the readers virtually have their own perspective. This is because through reading novels, readers can be able to see all angles of issues in each page of a writer. As well as this, they can put themselves in somebody shoes and are willing to share or talk with another person in an intimate conversation. To illustrate, most of well-known politicans always recommend people to read books, and most of them know how to attract listeners.

Another reason why I support the notion that readers are impacted by the benefits of novels is that they can naturally develop a focus and concentration skills. This is due to those who prefer reading are more likely to improve their memories. Beside that, it can boost cognitive development better than watching TV, especially for a youngsters. In addition, thanks to reading, language skills are easy to be improved in terms of writing and speaking. As well as this, book lovers can find it easy to learn brand-new vocabulary without feeling bored compared to textbooks at school.

In conclusion, I totally agree that the benefits of reading have helped people to enhance their imagination and language skills. Given this situation, it seems that everybody should strive to spend more time reading instead of watching telly in order to improve life skills.

 

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Some people believe that people who spend time reading novels have fostered their imagination as well as improved their skills in terms of language than those watching TV. I totally agree with the statement because of the benefits of reading has helped a myriad of people .

The first reason why I believe reading has developed artistry, [p1] is because all of the readers virtually have their own perspective. This is because through reading novels, readers can be able to see all angles of issues in each page of a writer of a book. As well as this, they can put themselves in somebody shoes and are willing to share or talk with another person in an intimate conversation. To illustrate, most of well-known politicans always recommend people to read books, and most of them know how to attract listeners.[p2] 

Another reason why I support the notion that readers are impacted by the benefits of novels is that they can naturally develop a focus and concentration skills. This is due to [p3] those who prefer reading are more likely to improve their memories. Beside that, it can boost cognitive development better than watching TV, especially for a youngsters[p4] . In addition, thanks to reading, language skills are easy to be improved in terms of writing and speaking. As well as this, book lovers can find it easy to learn brand-new vocabulary without feeling bored compared to textbooks at school.

In conclusion, I totally agree that the benefits of reading have helped people to enhance their imagination and language skills. Given this situation, it seems that everybody should strive to spend more time reading instead of watching telly watching the telly in order to improve life skills.


 [p1]Grammar Error: Do not add “comma”

 [p2]Task Achievement: Not a very relevant example

Reference: “To illustrate, well-known politicans are those recommend people to read books rather than watch TV…”

 [p3]Grammar Error: If you intend to write an explanation as a clause

-> “This is due to the fact that…”

-> “…due to the fact that those who prefer reading are more likely to improve their memories”

 [p4]Task Achievement: Any ideas must be explained thoroughly, or you must remove


CRITERIA

GRADE

COMMENT

 Task Response

6

  • addresses all parts of the task although some parts may be more fully covered than others
  • presents a relevant position although the conclusions may become unclear or repetitive
  • presents relevant main ideas but some may be inadequately developed/unclear

Coherence and Cohesion

6

  • arranges information and ideas coherently and there is a clear overall progression
  • uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical
  • may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately
  • uses paragraphing, but not always logically

Lexical Resource

6

  • uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task
  • attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy
  • makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation, but they do not impede communication

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6

  • uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms
  • makes some errors in grammar and punctuation but they rarely reduce communication

Overall

6

 

 

 

 


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