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Energy is going to run out, so we need to use it more properly everytime =>every time and everywhere, especialy =>especially at home- the place staying in much time. There are many ways to save energy at home. Firstly, you need to have a strict conscious about =>about using energy appropriately and it is your but not obliged. Secondly, you should turn off ther =>the energy when it is not essential. For example, you should turn off the light when you go out. You had better turn one bulb in ther =>the living room intead =>instead of  two bulbs. You should reduce the level of fire while the water is boiling. Thirdly, you can adjust your lifestyle such as reading books next to your balcony with full of sunshine, using machines which use clear power. In short, there are a lot of ways to save energy at home, you can create more and more.

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you need to have a strict conscious aboat using energy appropriately and it is your but not obliged. 
-> you need to have serious awareness of utilizing the electricity and a sense of responsibility for using it properly.
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good job guy <3

Energy is going to run out, so we need to use it more properly everytime and everywhere, especialy at home- the place staying in much time. There are many ways to save energy at home. Firstly, you need to have a strict conscious aboat using energy appropriately and it is your but not obliged. Secondly, you should turn off ther energy when it is not essential. For example, you should turn off the light when you go out. You had better turn one bulb in ther living room intead of  two bulbs. You should reduce the level of fire while the water is boiling. Thirdly, you can adjust your lifestyle such as reading books next to your balcony with full of sunshine, using machines which use clear power. In short, there are a lot of ways to save energy at home, you can create more and more.

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Dear Anna,

Having a job interview can be a very stressful experience. Some people tend to be nervous before the interview and this affects their performance.

The night before the interview, it always make sense to prepare your document the best because it’s very neccesary for your performance. By that way, you avoid a number of mistakes when interviewing. You had better practice many times at home. You fancy that you are talking to someone truly.  You try to carry out steps from introduction to saying “See you again” squently in order that you are more confident and natural.

In the morning of the interview, it is good to bring a bottle of water. If you feel a little nervous or your heart starts beating faster, drink the bottle to ease the fear. You only need read your document once again. No more, only one. Because you prepared delibrately yesterday, you will read it again to remind the knowledge.  You may feel so worrried when watching the document too much. Probably, putting up suitable clothing making you to be apprenticed is also your favourite clothing.

The first sight is so cardinal and a person's energy also makes an special impress in the interview. Therefore, greeting your interviewer by a bright smile or a simply friendly handshake is a wise way, which creat a cozy astmosphere. During the interview, you can’t help making mistakes, you had better not be awkward and confused.You should be calm down by taking a deep breath. If it is a small fault, you can skip it. Eyes contact is a valuable trick. You had better keep your eyes on the interviewer without neglect and listen carefully what he says.

I hope these advice will help you.

Best wishes

Diem

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