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The table below gives information about languages with the most native speakers.

 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Cho mình xin  một vài synonyms của learner/ speaker với ạ. Mình cảm ơn ạ.

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   The table illustrates the number of native speakers of six languages and that of non-native  learners. Overall, Mandarin Chinese registered the largest numbers of speakers, whereas the number of Portugese was the lowest figure.

   It can be seen that Mandarin Chinese exhibited 1090 million speakers, of which 900 millions of them were native and the rest (190 million) was non-native. In contrast, Portugese was least studied among the top six with 203 million native speakers and only 10 million people choosing it as an additonal language, a gap of 877 million people when compared to Mandarin Chinese learner numbers.

  Furthermore, Hindi and Spanish respectively ranked the second and the third as the most worldwide spoken languages. In detail, there were 350 million of Spanish speakers, which was nearly equal to the number of native Hindi (370 million). The number of foreinge learners of the two languages, however, were much different with 70 million Spanish learners and 120 million Hindi learners.  Besides, the most remarkable figures belonged to English with the number of non-native speakers (603 million) was higher than that of native speakers (339 million), following by Arabic total number of speakers which included 203 native Arabic and only 24 foreign learners. 

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Mình thấy bài của bạn có tồn tại một số vấn đề sau:

Thứ nhất là cách diễn đạt hơi bị rối bởi việc liệt kê quá nhiều con số, đôi chỗ không cần thiết như "a gap of 877 million people when compared to Mandarin Chinese learner numbers.". Cách giải quyết có lẽ là bạn nên tìm cách nhóm nước có điểm chung lại với nhau (vd Chinese và English).

Thứ hai là cách chia đoạn, ở đây dường như bạn chia đoạn theo cảm hứng và không tuân theo một quy luật nào. Bạn có thể thử chia 2 đoạn: 1 đoạn cho số liệu cao, 1 đoạn cho số liệu thấp.

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Cảm ơn góp ý của bạn ạ. Thật sự đúng là mình không biết cách nhóm hay chia số liệu sao cho đúng ạ =(((

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