,I strongly agree that the Internet plays an important role in our life. First of all, the Internet helps us to know more about the world. You can find any informations (more information) about the things you want to know on the Internet. Besides, the Internet also helps us to keep in touch with many people on social medias ( media)such as Facebook, Twitter and so on. In addition, the Internet has many videos, webs, images help us to study or useful for our works. ( which help/ assist us to improve our study and promote our work.) However ,I can't deny that the Internet also has many bad things. negative impacts on people 's daily routine, namely personality, and behaviors) Though, the Internet is ( one of) the greatest invention of human(s) so it plays an important (vital/indispensable/momentous/significant) role in our life.
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