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The given graph hightlights information about the amount of fast food which was eaten by Brishtish consumers in the UK, over a twenty-year period between 1970 and 1990.

 

Overall, what stands out from the graph is that there were dramatic upwars trends in the using of both Hambuger and Fish & Chips, while the consumption of pizza saw a gradual fall over the period in question. Another interesting point is that there was slight change all three kinds of junk food, while consumers ate less pizza than the others, the amount of hambuger and Fish & chips rise sharply at the same time.

 

Look at details, as regards Fish anf Chips, it was the most chosen by British consumers over two decades. The consumption started at under 100g in 1970, then there was a dramatic increase in 1980, completely around 500g per person in 1990, which jumped more four times in rising. The trend of hambuger also increased the same as Fish & Chips, with the using of this food rising from about 50g to under 300g per person. In contrast, Pizza stood at 300g, but in 1980, there was a slight fall to 200g, and then the consumption of food remained stable druing the next 10 years.

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The given graph hightlights information about the amount of fast food which was eaten by Brishtish -> British (lỗi chính tả) consumers in the UK, over a twenty-year period between 1970 and 1990.

Overall, what stands out from the graph is that there were dramatic upwars -> upwards (lỗi chính tả) trends in the using of both Hambuger and Fish & Chips, while the consumption of pizza saw a gradual fall over the period in question.

Another interesting point is that there was slight change all three kinds of junk food, while -> whereas (câu trước bạn dùng while nên câu này nên dùng từ khác để tránh lặp từ) consumers ate less pizza than the others, the amount of hambuger and Fish & chips rise sharply at the same time.

Look at details, as regards Fish anf -> and  (lỗi chính tả) Chips, it was the most chosen by British consumers over two decades. 

The trend of hambuger -> hamburger (lỗi chính tả) also increased the same as Fish & Chips, with the using of this food rising from about 50g to under 300g per person.

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