Hi Khanh Nguyen
Bài viết của bạn bố cục bài và chia ý rõ ràng. Diễn đạt qua tiếng anh thì chưa được smooth lắm, còn lỗi chính tã và lỗi ngữ pháp, phải dùng thi quá khứ đơn và quá khứ hoàn thành tiếp diễn.
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The line graph shows changes in the figure for people who travel by different means of transport within 60 years from 1970 to 2030.
Overall, it is clear that car => car vehicle is always the first choice of travellers => travelers during the observed peroid => period of time/ period. Also, while the commuters of car and train => car and train passengers increase dramatically, the number of people traveling by bus decreases considerably.
In 1970, car was the most popular form of transportation => which five million commuters daily (approximately 5 milions). Following, bus commuters ranked at the second => Bus ranked the second position with over 4 milions of users. However, in 2000, there was a slight frop drop in the number of people who choose ( giai đoạn này dùng thì quá khứ nhé) chose bus.
By 2030, it is anticipated that people continue showing their preference in cars (over 9 milions => millions of commuters). The Train is also predicted to soar remarkably from around 2 milions => millions to nearly 5 milions millions in users. By contrast, the number of passengers who travel by bus is expected to become less common and fall sharply to 2 milions => millions