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Platinum price

The line graph shows the price of platinum per ounce in US dollars between 1960 and 2005

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The graph shows the price of platinum per ounce in a fortyfive - year period from 1960 through 2005

As we can see, the price fluctuated throughout this period but reached the highest point in 1980 and 2005

At the beginning of this period, the price was below than 100$ per ounce. Then, there was a plateau of 100$ until late 1965 when there was a sudden acceleration from 100$ to about 280$ in 1970. This higher price did not last long, however, and it substantially decreased before a small increase at 200$. Then, this number remained steady around 180$ in late 1975. From 1980 to early 2000, before a fluctuation, the price reached a peak of 700$ in 1980. In 2000, this numver rocketed at 600$ and fell suddenly but then, it recovered and soared dramatically at about 880$,

Overall, the price is erratic through 45 years but it makes a significant upward trend later.

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The graph shows the price of platinum per ounce in a fortyfive - year period from 1960 through 2005

The line chart illustrates the information about the values of US currency each five years from 1960 to 2005. 

As we can see, the price fluctuated throughout this period but reached the highest point in 1980 and 2005

It is clear that the price fluctuated throughout this period and reached the highest point at about 870 dollars in the end.

At the beginning of this period, the price was below than 100$ per ounce. Then, there was a plateau of 100$ until late 1965 when there was a sudden acceleration from 100$ to about 280$ in 1970. This higher price did not last long, however, and it substantially decreased before a small increase at 200$. Then, this number remained steady around 180$ in late 1975. From 1980 to early 2000, before a fluctuation, the price reached a peak of 700$ in 1980. In 2000, this numver rocketed at 600$ and fell suddenly but then, it recovered and soared dramatically at about 880$,

Overall, the price is erratic through 45 years but it makes a significant upward trend later.

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The graph shows the price of platinum per ounce in America in a fortyfive - year period from 1960 through to 2005.

As we can see, the price fluctuated throughout this period but reached the highest point in 1980 and 2005 (biều đồ 1980 và 2005 không bằng nhau)

At the beginning of this period, the price was below than 100$ per ounce. Then, there was a plateau of 100$ until late 1965 when there was a sudden acceleration from 100$ to about 280$ in 1970. This higher price did not last long, however, and it substantially decreased before a small increase at 200$. Then, this number remained steady around 180$ in late 1975. From 1980 to early 2000, before a fluctuation, the price reached a peak of 700$ in 1980. In 2000, this numver rocketed at 600$ and fell suddenly but then, it recovered and soared dramatically at about 880$,

Overall, the price is erratic through 45 years but it makes a significant upward trend later.

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