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Some individuals might hold their strong beliefs that children should be educated with parenting methods in order to become civilians who benefit their society. While it is true to some extent, I share the same point of view with others’ opinion that the most appropriate place for a child could be schooling environment.

One the one hand, it is argued that parents are the individuals who give birth to their children, nurture and expect them to be grown-ups and their pivotal role in educating them is undeniable. A wide range of parenting approaches are likely to be utilized on a regular basis with an aim to assisting their teenage children to be good ones in society. Some children, who behave properly with their peers or respect older people and live in the society without committing any crimes, would probably be taught by their whole-hearted parents with morality lessons. For instance, a child would become a good role model if he was instructed which things are permitted and which ones are forbidable during his adolescence.

On the other hand, children’s access to school is highly recommended as they would have specific knowledge acquisition in a myriad of aspects. As a matter of fact, these children, therefore would possibly be equipped sufficiently with soft skills and life skills involving first aids and self-protection. Besides, academic places would be more efficacious if  children who have difficulty struggling with their obstacles could easily tackle with them. To give a prime example, some high school students would have committed juvenile crimes if it had not been for assistance from teachers and school.

In conclusion, there is still debate whether children should be well educated in suitable academic environment as in school or at home. In my opinion, the opportunity to study with other peers and teachers would be more reasonable with aforementioned reasons.
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Some individuals might hold their strong beliefs that children should be educated with parenting methods in order to become civilians who benefit their society. While it is true to some extent, I share the same point of view with others’ opinion that the most appropriate place for a child child-reaing (or sth, because 'a child' is not clear enough') could be the schooling environment.

One the one hand, it is argued that parents are the individuals who give birth to their children, nurture and expect them to be grown-ups. Hence, and their fathers and mothers' pivotal role in educating them their child is undeniable. A wide range of parenting approaches are likely to be utilized on a regular basis with an aim to assisting their teenage children to be good ones citizens in of society. Some children, who behave properly with their peers or respect older people and live in the society without committing any crimes, would probably be have been taught by their whole-hearted parents with morality lessons. For instance, a child would become a good role model if he was instructed which things are permitted and which ones are forbidable during his adolescence.

On the other hand, children’s access to school children's receipt of moral instructions at school is highly recommended as they would have acquire specific knowledge acquisition in a myriad of real-life aspects. As a matter of fact, these children, therefore would possibly be equipped sufficiently with sufficient soft skills and life skills involving first aids and self-protection. Besides, academic places would be more efficacious if  children who have difficulty struggling with their obstacles could are taugh how to (easily) tackle with them. To give a prime example, some high school students would have committed juvenile crimes if it had not been for assistance from teachers and school.

In conclusion, there is still debate whether children should be well educated to be well-behaved citizens in suitable academic environment as in school or at home. In my opinion, the opportunity to study with other peers and teachers would be more reasonable with the aforementioned reasons.
Comment: Từ vựng rộng, cấu trúc tốt. Mình have a high opinion of this essay nhé :)). 
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