Over the past few decades, controlling noise has become a controversial issue in our society. While one school of thought holds that they are free to make noise without restrictions; I come from the school of thought which believes that it could be better to have a law against it.( nghe hơi lạ nên sửa lại)
On the one hand, people enjoy making noise for various reasons -There are several reasons why people enjoy making noise . Firstly, they will feel more comfortable and free if they can make noise when working or entertaining. For example, although it can be a nuisance to the neighbors; listening to music with louder volume can bring them relaxation after a long working day. Secondly, nobody can deny that noise has become a part of modernization and industrialization (giải thích nó ra không nên nói chung chung ). Moreover, traffic noise seems to be familiar to urban citizens ( explain vs lại quá ngắn. Hence, they feel that there is no particular reason to control noise.
On the other hand, I reckon that there is more beneficial if authority pass a law to control noise. The first reason is that noise affects negatively to people’s health. By ways of illustration (or to give an illustration, some of my friend cannot sleep at night due to intrusive sounds from a nearby industrial zone. If this situation happens in a long term, it will lead to some harmful influences for both physical and mental health. In addition, job productive might decrease because of noise. White-collar workers often complain that they could not focus on their job since noise from vehicles.
In conclusion, I believe that we should control noise in order to have a better life whereas others might think that they can make noise freely as they like.
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