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By just following our friends and relatives on social media, it is quite apparent to realize that people are traveling much more than ever. The reasons behind the trend can be varied from the technological to economic advancement. Regardless of the true causes, travelers are always benefited from their journeys.

Initially, the role of technological breakthrough in providing more accessible and vital traveling information is undeniable. With popularity of tourism apps, the publicized prices, schedules, and status of hotels and transportations facilitate people to arrange an affordable yet effective and enjoyable tour by themselves without depending heavily on travel agents like they used to before. Additionally, the rapid growth of the global economy has brought about numerous opportunities to work remotely. Far gone the day when people have to show up at the workplace to complete their work, it is the time for emails, Skype, conference meetings, etc. Some other new born freelancing jobs even require frequent travels to accomplish their projects, for instance travel bloggers, food bloggers or photographers, etc.         

On the other hand, the continuously changing environment has put more intense pressure, from not just workload but also family and peers, on people. For this reason, they are more prone to free themselves and recharge with a short break  from that hustle and bustle. But foremost, people make their way on their journeys to look up for beauty of nature, the cultural diversity and even the disadvantages of living conditions in many other places to open their eyes, mind and heart. More than digging up into the geological location, traveling helps people to find themselves.

In a nutshell, traveling is significantly expanded, in both scales and forms, allowing more people at different social class who do different types of job to find a suitable way to release themselves in busy life these days.      

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Additionally, the rapid growth of the global economy has brought about numerous opportunities to work remotely. Far gone the day when people have to show up at the workplace to complete their work, it is the time for emails, Skype, video conference meetings, etc. Some other new born freelancing jobs even require frequent travels to accomplish their projects, for instance travel bloggers, food bloggers or photographers, etc. ( không nên sử dụng"etc" trong essay)

On the other hand, the continuously changing environment has put more intense pressure, not only workload but also family and peers, on people. For this reason, they are more prone to free themselves and recharge with a short break  from that hustle and bustle. But foremost, people make their way on their journeys where look up for beauty of nature, the cultural diversity and even the disadvantages of living conditions in many other places to open their eyes, mind and heart.( không logic) .More than digging up into the geological location, traveling helps people to find themselves. (khá khó hiểu)

In a nutshell, traveling is significantly expanded, in both scales and forms .It is also allowing more people at different social class who do different types of job to find a suitable way to release themselves in busy life these days.      

 

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