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There are many famous person in the world. For me, the person who I admire is Ho Chi Minh. He was born in 1980 in Nam Dan district, in Nghe An province and passed away. However, he is still a hero in Vietnamese. He also was our great President who found the way to save our country and led Vietnamese became free and independent like now. I like his because he is a good person, love the country and people and he is not only very kind, intelligent but also considerate, generous, …. Perhaps I love everything about him. That’s why I admire so much. He is a shining example for me to follow.
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There are many famous person in the world. For me, the person who I admire is Ho Chi Minh. He was born in 1980 in Nam Dan district, in Nghe An province and passed away. However, he is still a hero in Vietnamese. He also was our great President who found the way to save our country and led Vietnamese became free and independent like now. I like his because he is a good person, love the country and people and he is not only very kind, intelligent but also considerate, generous, …. Perhaps I love everything about him. That’s why I admire so much. He is a shining example for me to follow.

- many famous person >>> famous people.

in Vietnamese >>> in Vietnam/ to Vietnamese

like now >>> as the present days

I like his >>> I like him

love the country and people >>> loves

 

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There are many famous person in the world. For me, the person who I admire is Ho Chi Minh. He was born in 1980 in Nam Dan district, in Nghe An province and passed away. However, he is still a hero in Vietnamese. He also was our great President who found the way to save our country and led Vietnamese became free and independent like now. I like his because he is a good person, love the country and people and he is not only very kind, intelligent but also considerate, generous, …. Perhaps I love everything about him. That’s why I admire so much. He is a shining example for me to follow. -> câu này mình biết là sai nhưng không phải viết vậy.

-> There are many famous people in the world. For me, the person who I admire is Ho Chi Minh. He was born in 1980 in Nam Dan district, in Nghe An province and passed away. However, he is still a hero in Vietnamese. He was also our great President who found the way to save our country and led Vietnamese became free and independent as the present days. I like him because of his spiritual, patriotism. In addition, he is not only very kind, intelligent but also considerate and generous. Perhaps I love everything about him. That’s why I admire so much. He is a shining example for me to follow.

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