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Traditionally, there are many people favor academic qualifications over life experience or good personality trait . In today’s society , social skill is equally important as academic qualification . Personally , I agree with this view point to some extent

There are many a number of reasons why academic degree takes advantage of person’s academic background and professional experience . Firstly , Many companies require job-hunting candidates to possess a certain level of qualification , this means they need to equip either in-depth knowledge or skill . Secondly , if someone is likely to devote a lot of time to his or her diligent study and effort to his or her study in order to attend an advanced university, which mean they prove that they are hard-won candidate and preserving . Therefore some people reckon that qualification is not only criteria , it may lead to prejudice (thành kiến) and wrong judgment. But also the qualification is vital standard when other information is not available

On the other hand , there are many reasons people aware of the importance of social skills. It is not uncommon that a person with life experience helps everyone to deal with difficult situations more effectively , which help improve worker productivity . Besides , relationship with colleagues enhances the efficiency in workplaces , giving people more sense of satisfaction out of their job . By contrast , if people do not know how to get along with their workmates , they would suffer from extra stress in their work . Furthermore , social skill assist people to enlarge the circle of friends and enrich their lives . with the positive attitude towards other people , one would be able to deal with all kinds of challenges in their life or work

To summarize, I would argued that people need to balance between academic qualifications and life experience or good personalities in order to communicate and cooperate with other people into worldwide

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Traditionally, there are many people favor academic qualifications over life [W1] experience or good personality trait . In today’s society , social skill is equally important as academic qualification[W2]  [W3] . Personally , I agree with this view point to some extent

There are many a number of reasons why academic degree takes advantage of person’s academic background and professional experience[W4]  . Firstly , Many companies require job-hunting candidates to possess a certain level of qualification , this means they need to equip either in-depth knowledge or skill[W5]  . Secondly , if someone is likely to devote a lot of time to his or her diligent study and effort to his or her study in order to attend an advanced university, which mean they prove that they are hard-won candidate and preserving[W6]  . Therefore some people reckon that qualification is not only criteria , it may lead to prejudice (thành kiến) and wrong judgment.[W7]  But also the qualification is vital standard when other information is not available[W8]

On the other hand [W9] , there are many reasons[W10]  people aware of the importance of social skills[W11] . It is not uncommon that a person with life experience helps everyone to deal with difficult situations more effectively , which help improve worker productivity[W12]  . Besides , relationship with colleagues enhances the efficiency in workplaces , giving people more sense of satisfaction out of their job . By contrast , if people do not know how to get along with their workmates , they would suffer from extra stress in their work . Furthermore , social skill assist people to enlarge the circle of friends and enrich their lives . with the positive attitude towards other people , one would be able to deal with all kinds of challenges in their life or work[W13]

To summarize, I would argued[W14]  that people need to balance between academic qualifications and life experience or good personalities in order to communicate and cooperate with other people into worldwide

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 [W1]Grammar error: => which is over than ………

 [W2]Repeat word:   some  recommend: educational knowledge, scholastic  information

 [W3] Expression suggestion:  individual’s opinions differ as to whether or not scholastic information beat over than personality trait.

 [W4]Expression error: it seems to a misunderstood.  The question statement mentions ACADEMIC QUALIFICATION AND SOFT SKILL.

 [W5]Expression error: the sentence do not support or explain for  the  idea.  Please review carfully by  yourself

 [W6]Expression error: I do not get what it means.

  • Secondly, we are living in advanced civilization  therefore the speciality is almost compulsory for all position in company. For example,  tech engineers are able to prevent  anonymous attact on banking system

 [W7]Expression error: you mention the benefit of academic qualification, this sentence is not relevant anymore

 [W8]Expresssion error: same error as above comment 7

 [W9]Expression suggestion: if you want to use this structure, it needs to use in two paragraph ‘’ THE ONE HAND; THE OTHER ONE HAND ‘’

 [W10]Repeat words

 [W11]Grammar error:  aware (adj) => people are aware….

 [W12]Expression error: it is not clear and very weird to me ( it is not uncommon ? )

  • Soft skill help a lot to improve productivity in work and lives.

 [W13]Expression suggestion : in working,  the good result always depend on level of coporating among colleages. Individuals are able to connect people to work smoothly  which usually are promoted to leader position etc ..

 [W14]Grammar error: it is too basic, you should review it by  yourself

 

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