The diagram illustrates the process of recycling plastics. (bạn có thể paraphase lại hoặc sử dụng symnonym,( like: The diagram illustrates the lengthy process of how plastics recylce/ the recycling plastice proceeding.... ).It is clear (from the diagram) that there are six main stages involved in the reproduction of plastics, beginning with selling plastic products and ending with delivering finished products to shops.(or all of which are clearly explained in the given diagram)
The process begins with (lặp từ) ( To start with), people purchase things like bottles and something (có thể paraphrase lại như sau: Bottles are bought and used) is contained in bags and rubbish. After that, while bags and rubbish are thrown away and brought to landfill,while bottles are collected for recycling purposes.
In the next stage of the process, bottles that are collected are delivered (shortly => bottles are collected and delivered) to a place called sorting house. The process continues with those (And then At some point after this/ from then on, they) bottles are transported by a truck to a factory. Following this, at this place, the recycling process of plastic happens and in this process, the factory emits carbon dioxide into the air. The final stage of the process is that the finished products manufactured from the factory are delivered to shops to sell.
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