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People have different views about children’s homework. Although some people are of fervent conviction that teachers should not give children homework, I would argue that is is necessary for children to do their homework.

On the one hand, those opposing the necessity of homework have a tendency to consider that school day is long enough, so it is therefore advisable that children spend more time on outdoor activites such as playing sports, partaking in social programmes or helping their parents clean house. Hence, were children not to be coerced into doing homework, they would have a chance to relax with their peers and family, which can be seen as a positive development for mental and physical health.

Compelling as this argument seems, I am fierce in the assertion that homework holds a crucial position in the schooling of children. The reason is that it highly encourages independent learning and problem solving. This means children are required to work through tasks without helps at their own pace and to apply the knowledge accumulated in the classroom. By way of illustration, the recent research conducted by Florida State University revealed that the more maths homework a student do in one day, the quicker he seems to deal with number problems. As a result, homework is considered to be a useful method to prepare people to work alone as adults.

In conclusion,  it seems to me that homework should not be abolished to help children consolidate their knowledge as well as form some life skills which are essential in their future.
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People have different views about children’s homework. Although some people are of the fervent conviction that teachers should not give children homework, I would argue that is necessary for children to do their homework.
 
On the one hand, those opposing the necessity of homework have a tendency to consider that school day is long enough, so it is therefore advisable that children spend more time on outdoor activities such as playing sports, partaking in social programmes or helping their parents clean house. Hence, were children not to be coerced into doing homework, they would have a chance to relax with their peers and family, which can be seen as a positive development for mental and physical health.
 
Compelling as this argument seems, I am fierce in the assertion that homework holds a crucial position in the schooling of children. The reason is that it highly encourages independent learning and problem-solving. This means children are required to work through tasks without bits of help at their own pace and to apply the knowledge accumulated in the classroom. By way of illustration, the recent research conducted by Florida State University revealed that the more maths homework a student do in one day, the quicker he seems to deal with number problems. As a result, homework is considered to be a useful method to prepare people to work alone as adults.
 
In conclusion,  it seems to me that homework should not be abolished to help children consolidate their knowledge as well as form some life skills which are essential in their future.
 
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