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Nowadays, Internet has become such a convenient way to get useful information about everything. However, it is also believed that newspaper will remain the most important source of news. i partly agree with this opinion due to some following reasons.

On the one hand, News on the Internet grows in popularity owing to its potential benefits. People can have a quick access to the sources of communication and by many ways such as using mobile phones, computers or laptops. Thus, having more knowledge about what they need. In addition to this, information that Internet provides us is objective because the Internet users are able to share their own opinions. Nevertheless, Internet is a very suitable environment to discuss anything. That is where we can give off our own ideas and receive many different views from others.

However, it is undeniable that newspaper bring us many considerable benefits. The first benefit that people can mention is that newspaper provides us with extremely reliable sources of information. Every articles which are available on newspaper have been carefully appraised by the publisher. Moreover, the people who write these articles are professional and experienced. Secondly, newspaper is suitable for all ages, especially elderly, who are not accustomed to using the Internet. Children can also read them in lieu of facing with a large amount of information that is not clear and perhaps, unsuitable. Furthermore, newspaper also supply people with general knowledge. For instance, many businesses are in need of information that is related to their job and reading newspaper is such a reliable way to tackle that.

In conclusion, although the Internet has a large number of advantages and is becoming more popular, the newspaper will remain a important source of news, even in the Internet age.

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Nowadays, Internet has become[SC1]  such a convenient way [SC2] to get useful information about everything. However, it is also believed [SC3] that newspaper will remain the most important source of news.[SC4]  i partly agree with this opinion due to some following reasons.

On the one hand, News[SC5]  on the Internet grows in popularity owing to its potential benefits. People can have a quick access to the sources of communication and by many ways such as using mobile phones, computers or laptops[W6] . Thus, having more knowledge about what they need.[W7]  In addition to this, information that Internet provides us is objective because the Internet users are able to share their own opinions[W8] . Nevertheless, Internet is a very suitable environment to discuss anything. That is where we can give off our own ideas and receive many different views from others.[W9]

However,[W10]  it is undeniable that newspaper bring us many considerable benefits. The first benefit[W11]  that people can mention is that newspaper provides us with extremely reliable sources of information. Every articles which are available on newspaper have been carefully appraised by the publisher. Moreover, the people who write these articles are professional and experienced[W12] . Secondly, newspaper is suitable for all ages, especially elderly, who are not accustomed to using the Internet. Children can also read them in lieu of facing with a large amount of information that is not clear and perhaps, unsuitable.[W13]  Furthermore, newspaper also supply people with general knowledge. For instance, many businesses are in need of information that is related to their job and reading newspaper is such a reliable way to tackle that[W14] .

In conclusion, although the Internet has a large number of advantages and is becoming more popular, the newspaper will remain a important source of news, even in the Internet age.

 


 [SC1]Grammar error: became ( V – past)

 [SC2]Grammar error:  form: such as + N

 [SC3]Expression suggestion: it is very weird to me, => people’s opinions

 [SC4]Expression suggestion: =>  play imperative role  of

 [SC5]Grammar error: after this symbol ‘ ,’ no capital letter

 [W6]Expression suggestion: people are able to access to sources of information which use electronic devices such as cellphones, tablets, computers.

 [W7]Expression suggestion: consequently individual could aqquire certain knowledge easily and rapidly

 [W8]Expression suggestion: this sentence is not clear

 [W9]Expression suggestion:  Internet is unique place which connect people around the word through softwere application as facebook, whatsapp, wechat.

 [W10]Suggestion expression: you should use consitent form in writing task 2. At the second paragraph  use’ on the one hand’, third paragraph should use ‘ on the other hand’

 [W11]Reapeat word: => advantage

 [W12]Expression suggestion :your idea is not approriate in meaning,

 [W13]The sentence is failed to explain or support second idea

 [W14]Expression suggestion :your idea is not approriate in meaning,

 

 

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