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Ielt task 2 đề dự đoán năm 2018

Life of the elderly in morden world is much more easier than in the past. Discuss both view and give your own opinion

It is belive that the old people have a better life in th present than in the past. I suppose that the benefit ooff the suitable policy provide enough the need for them

On the one hand, The supportion of the high quality of the qualication make the elderly’s life much more easier. In the development countries, government have a suitable policy for them. For example, the health care condition, accommodation and the welfare that they will have receive when they tired. Some national organization  in the development countries and the poverty countries whichcontract together to give them an opportunity to participate their activity so that they can have a best choice to impove their standar of live, although their health and their pcychology.

On the orther hand, I blieve that elderly in the past had suffer a worst live. Because of the lack of healh care condition, the poverty of food that they have a problem with their healthy such as heart desease, cancer, etc. overmore, the appearance of pandemic, which had killed a thousand of old people have a weakness of immune system, a lack of medical condition and the lack of the awakeness of the desease pevention.

In conclusion, there is no reason to argue that in this mordenn life, the elderly have a better life than in the past that they have receive enough the supportion of the benefit of policies, which ban by the enthusiasm government.  

 

 

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It is belive that the old people have a better life in th present than in the past(?). I suppose that the benefit ooff the suitable policy provide enough the need for them

On the one hand, The supportion of the high quality of the qualication make the elderly’s life much more easier. In the development countries, governments have a suitable policy for them. For example, the health care condition, accommodation and the welfare that they will have receive when they tired. Some national organization  in the development countries and the poverty countries which contract together to give them an opportunity to participate their activity so that they can have a best choice to impove their standar of live, although their health and their pcychology.

On the orther hand, I blieve that elderly in the past had suffer a worst live. Because of the lack of healh care condition, the poverty of food that they have a problem with their healthy such as heart desease, cancer, etc. overmore, the appearance of pandemic, which had killed a thousand of old people have a weakness of immune system, is a lack of medical condition and the lack of the awakeness of the desease pevention.

In conclusion, there is no reason to argue that in this mordenn life, the elderly have a better life than in the past that they have receive enough the supportion of the benefit of policies, which ban by the enthusiasm government.  

 

Disadvantages of your essay:

+ Not enogh 250 words which means that you won't get high score

+ You have many mistakes about grammar and volcabulary

+ Introduction part is not really strong enough to get attention from examiners

Advantages:

+  The essay is not bad

+ Good argument,

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