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An increasing number of people tend to live by themselves. What are the causes? Is it a positive or negative development?

 

    In this day and age, the trend of living alone has rose. The situation is caused by some factors that will be detailed in this essay.

   Among the causes, that sons and daughters work in other places is one of them. In order to land better jobs and earn higher salary, so they leave their parents and live in other cities also by themselves. For example, many senior citizens live alone especially in the countryside. Their children work in metropolises and only visit them in long holidays. To top of everything, the elderly live alone is a serious social issue nowadays.

 Another factor is that young generation do not get married. Inasmuch as nowadays females easily get high education even if sometimes higher than males. Thus, job achievements and broaden their horizons are the things they pursuing instead of getting married and having babies. The situation can be seen in the rate of the adult who are age for marriage are single has rocketed.

 In my opinion, a increasing number of individuals who live alone will bring negative effects. For instance, the government need to input colossal resource to caring single old generation. Additionally, people who live by themselves are easily feel lonely and no others can help with each other. Therefore, negative impacts of the trend are outweigh positive effects.

 To conclude, many individuals living alone arises from the youth working in other land and unmarried. As for me, I believe that is a unwell development to the social.

 

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In this day and age, the trend of living alone has rose(risen). The situation is cause by some factorthat will be detailed in this essay.

Among the causes, that sonsand daughters work in other places is one of them.( Children work in other places is one of the main reasons). In order to land better jobs and earn higher salary, so they ( not use “In order to ... so”) leave their parents iand live in other cities also by themselves. For example ( Reality has shown that), many senior citizens (youngster) live alone, especially in the countryside. Their children ( They ) work in metropolis and only visit them ( their parents )  in a long holidays. To top of everything,... (Thay will lead to the increase in the number of elderly who live alone).

Another factor is that young generation do not get married. ( Another factor is the rise in the rate of youngsters do not get married). Inasmuch as nowadays females easily get high education even if sometimes higher than (as) males (so) job achievements and broaden their horizon ( jobs experiences and achievements ) are the things they pursuing instead of getting married and having babies.

In my opinion, a (the) increasing number of individuals who live alone will bring negatives effects. For instances, the government need to inputcolossal resource to caring ( take care of ) single old generation (people).Additionally, people who live by themselves are easily feel lonely and no other can help each other.

To conclude ...

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