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Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe action can be taken to bring about a change.

Discuss both and give your opinion.

Nowadays, fauna and flora have been damaged by human activity. Some opinions have been given out that nothing can be changed but having some contrariwise idea that advantage action can bring about a change because they still think that they still have enough time to prevent the environment from being further polluted. From my point of view, I still joint doing the positive action for better environment and shining future.

Disadvantage activities making environment injured are from low awareness of individuals and society in protective faunas and floras work. Because every action of each person start from their mind that if citizens don’t know the environmental importance, they will not have any responsibility in the protective natural world such as necessary effects that environment bring to. Governments in many countries have passed law controlling pollution, alternative sources of energy are researched, environment-friendly products are promoted to raise people’s awareness of environmental protection. Enhancing consciousness to protect nature is the same meaning with doing for better daily life.

Any environmental positive actions all have favourable impacts in helping nature but each effect needs a period to operate and some people don’t see long effect of activities so they think that nature cannot be regenerated. The sincere attitude and conscious efforts for waiting can be paid by environmental renovations, proving and preserving accommodation. Each small action which has believe can encourage people to change their mind and together start reusing, reducing, and recycling recyclables, have the incentive to improve nature and give million better lives.

In my opinion, renewable energy effectively utilizes natural resources such as sunlight, wind, tides, and geothermal heat which can be remade, regrown, and regenerated. My claim is that only a government is able to fully evaluate a project such as energy and its future benefits.

In conclusion, renewable energy is a possible mean for preventing increasing of environmental pollution and each small action can give more people better lives.

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Tôi nghĩ là: 

is a possible mean---> is a possible means

 increasing of environmental pollution ---> an increase in environmental pollution

 impacts in ---> impacts on 

Bạn cố gắng viết 1 đoạn như sau: 1 câu chủ đề(nên là câu đơn), 2 câu giải thích(sử dụng mệnh đề quan hệ, phức ), hỗ trợ và 2 ví dụ --> 1 đoạn 5 câu nhìn mạch lạc hơn

nói chung là hơi lủng củng

Bạn cố lên nhé 

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