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In recent years, a growing number of computers are developing. A piece of technology which has helped for student in a great way is computers. Computers are used in every sphere in life and play an important role in student’s life such as study as well as relaxing.
 
In the first place, computers are device which help students to find a large amount of knowledge. A computer is connected internet. Document is looked up easily. A great number of universities, students have to compose a presentation. It requires that the talk ought to acquire vivid and attractive. A ways to pay attention audiences are that using computers. Learners can prepare power-point with several pictures, keywords, video to give example for their presentation. 
 
Another are where computers have helped student is in the communication field. It enable them keep in touch with their family by means of internet chats, video calls similar to Skype, social networking and various applications.  They can contact each other by phone also, but phone calls are quite expensive.  At the present time, they can contact out family and friends; and often see them without spending the extra penny. Computers is used for relaxing by student. They listen to music, play game, read e-books or chat to friends after a tired day.
 
To sum up, thank to computer that undergraduate study easier and more opportune than. Computers have several strengths. Students gain lots of advantages from computer such as: finding information, contacting with teacher, family or friend, and relaxing.  Hoping computer is an increasing number of evolving to help for student’s life.
 
 
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Hi Selena98, mình thấy bài bạn khá hoàn chỉnh và ổn, nhưng vẫn còn một vài lỗi không đáng mắc phải về từ vựng và grammar:

 In recent years, a growing number of computers are developing --> In recent years, the number of computers is developing/ In recent years, there is a growth in the number of computers. 

 A computer is connected internet. Document is looked up easily. A great number of universities, students have to compose a presentation. --> diễn đạt hơi lủng củng và mình thấy hơi thiếu liên kết và khó hiểu. Gợi ý: The easier the internet connects , the easier the document is lookep up. 

Computers is used for relaxing by student ---> Computers are used for relaxing by student 

 

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In recent years, with the rapid development of technology, computers has become increasingly popular a growing number of computers are developing. A piece of technology which has helped for student in a great way is computers. Computers are used in every sphere in life and play an important role in human’s life, especially students. They render students lot of advantages.

                                                                             

In the first place, computers are device which help students to find a large amount of knowledge broaden their horizons. Through connecting computer to the Internet, document is looked up easily. In a great number of universities, students have to make a presentation. It requires that the talk ought to acquire be vivid and attractive. Hence,  the best way to pay attention attract the audiences’ attention is that using computers. Learners can to prepare power-point with several pictures, keywords, and videos to give examples for their presentation. 

 

Another merit are where computers have helped student is in the communication field  is that computers are major means of communication. It Students are able to keep in touch with their family by means of internet chats, video calls similar to Skype, social networking and various applications They can contact each other by phone also, but phone calls are quite expensive.  At the present time, they can contact out family and friends; and often see them without worrying about spending the extra penny. Also, computers are used for relaxing by student. They that students can listen to music, play games, read e-books or chat to friends after a tired day.

 

To sum up, thanks to computers, undergraduate study is easier and more opportune, so students gain lots of advantages from computers such as: finding information, contacting with teacher, family or friend, and relaxing. Hoping computers are an increasing number of evolving to help for student’s life.

 

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