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Bar chart - House prices

The bar chart compares the cost of housing in five urban areas from 1989 to 2002.

As can be seen from the chart, Madrid was the only city which saw a stable increase in the prices of homes over the period provided. In addition, the cost of homes in London was the highest by 2002.

Firstly, from 1989 to 1995, there was a rise in the cost of homes located in Madrid and Frankfurt, climbing by around 2% and 3%, respectively. However, the figures for New York, Tokyo, and London followed the different pattern, falling by 5%, 7% and 7% respectively.

Secondly, from 1989 to 2002, Tokyo was the only city which saw a decline in the prices of homes, going down by 5%. Nevertheless, the figure for Tokyo had an upward trend between 1990 and 2002, rising by 2%. Besides, New York, Madrid, Frankfurt, and London experienced an acceleration in the house prices over 13-year period, jumping by 5%, 4%, 2% and 12%, respectively.

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The bar chart compares the cost of house in five urban areas from 1989 to 2002.

As we can see be seen ( lỗi diễn đạt) from the chart, Madrid was only the only  (ngữ pháp )city which saw a stable increase in the price of home prices of homes over the period provided. In addition, the cost of home homes in London was the highest by 2002.

Firstly, from 1989 to 1995, there was a rise in the cost of home homes located (Lỗi ngữ pháp) in Madrid and Frankfurt, climbing by around 2% and 3%, respectively. By contrast  However, the figures for New York, Tokyo, and London followed the different pattern, falling by 5%, 7% and 7% (lỗi về diễn đạt, chỉ có 1 mô hình là giá đi xuống) respectively.

Secondly, from 1989 to 2002, Tokyo was the only city which saw a decline in the price of home (Không chia số nhiều) prices of homes, the price or it went down going down by 5%. (thì quá khứ) .Nevertheless, the figure for Tokyo had an upward trend between 1990 and 2002, rose(lỗi ngữ pháp) rising by 2%. Besides, New York, Madrid, Frankfurt, and London experienced an acceleration in the house prices over 13-year period, jumped( lỗi ngữ pháp) jumping by 5%, 4%, 2% and 12%, respectively.

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