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Rural depopulation

While rural population tends to increase,the population in urban areas tends to decrease apparently. Although this phenomenon can be attributed to a host of factors, governments can adopt some viable solutions to restore people’s interest in urban sphere.

There are underlying reasons for the outbreak of rural population.First and foremost,the rising number of environmental pollution such as air,noise and water can be considered as the significant factor used to explain for this situation.The uncontrollable number of pollution in urban areas can greatly lead to the decline of people's health and cause many deseases.Therefore,it is common knowledge that people will definitely choose the better way is to move to live in rural areas instead of cities to avoid being affected by polluted environment.The decrease in living standards while the price of hiring houses are gradually becoming tremendously high just because the demands of life in this competitive world are unintentionally encouraging people to migrate to rural sector.Moreover,the uncontrolled growth of cities,shops and skyscrapers along with the high unemployment rate gives people no choice but to move to live in rural wards.If there are more cities built day by day,there will be no vacancy left for us to construct houses or to develop farming system of livestock and this may lead to the creation of slums.

In order to increase the number of residents in cities, states must take the following feasible measures and actions must be taken immediately.In order to stem the tide of this phenomenon,services and facilities must be reeqipped and innovated to be much better.The advantage of surburbs is that they have the availability of shopping centers,hospitals and schools which are much attractive than in the countryside.Thence,the leaders of large cities must take advantage of this as pros.Governments should reclassify the transport system and relocate large companies as well as factories and universities so as to make better living condition.

In conclusion, the low rate of citizens in urban areas can be ascribed to various reasons and the government should implement the proposed solutions to alleviate the situation.

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In order to increase the number of residents in cities, states must take the following feasible measures and actions must be taken immediately.In order to stem the tide of this phenomenon,services and facilities must be reeqipped and innovated to be much better.The advantage of surburbs is that they have the availability of shopping centers,hospitals and schools which are much attractive than in the countryside.Thence,the leaders of large cities must take advantage of this as pros.Governments should reclassify the transport system and relocate large companies as well as factories and universities so as to make better living condition.

In conclusion, the low rate of citizens in urban areas can be ascribed to various reasons and the government should implement the proposed solutions to alleviate the situation.

 

 

văn cậu thế là hay lắm rồi...ko có lỗi dai nhiều mà..hoặc mình tìm không ra.

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