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Bài IELTS Task 1 tối 24/11 - KHTN HCM - Comparison

Free time activities of the elderly in EU from the 1980s to the 2010s was divided into five activities, they were reading, hiking, theatre, playing sport and surfing the internet.

in the 1980s, elderly people spent sixty percent of their free time on playing sport as the highest and the lowest was surfing the internet with approximately five percent

In the 1990s, the highest was still playing sport and It was the same in the 2000s. But in the 2010s, Playing sport was passed over by hiking. At that time, the lowest was the theater with forty-five percent

The percent of hiking had increased twenty percent every ten years from twenty percent to eighty percent

Surfing the internet and hiking were two of five activities that constantly increased over thirty years.

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Free time activities of the elderly in EU from the 1980s to the 2010s was divided into five activities, they were reading, hiking, theatre, playing sport and surfing the internet.

in the 1980s, elderly people spent sixty percent of their free time on playing sport as the highest and the lowest was surfing the internet with approximately five percent

In the 1990s, the highest was still playing sport and It was the same in the 2000s. But in the 2010s, Playing sport was passed over by hiking. At that time, the lowest was the theater with forty-five percent

The percent of hiking had increased twenty percent every ten years from twenty percent to eighty percent

Surfing the internet and hiking were two of five activities that constantly increased over thirty years.

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