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I went on a picnic to (Ha Long) in last summer holiday with my classmates. 
Ha Long is about 150 km from Hanoi capital, a well known town in QuangNinh province in Vietnam. The beach at Halong is beautiful, and there is an iron mine near by. 

We arrived at that place in the morning. After getting out of the bus, we separated into different groups and looked for shady places to spend the day. 

Soon, most of us went swimming. While in the water, we were playing a few interesting games. Those who were on the beach were playing other games. Some of them even sang songs and danced. There were still others who were interested in nothing, except picking shells. 

In short, everyone enjoyed the trip. In the evening, we returned home in our bus, thinking of the fun we had had at that place. I enjoyed the trip so much.

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Well, I went on a picnic to (Ha Long) in last summer holiday with my classmates.  
Ha Long is about 150 km from Hanoi capital(it 's a 2 -hour-ride from hanoi capital by bus).Ha Long is a well known town in QuangNinh province in Vietnam. The beach at Halong is beautiful, and there is an iron mine near by.It acquired many reputation for its stunning beaches and iron mine nearby. 

We arrived at that place in the morning. After getting out of the bus, we separated into different groups and looked for shady places to spend the day.  

Soon, most of us went swimming. (Most of us went for a swim)While in the water, we were playing a few interesting watering games. Those who were on the beach were playing other games. Some of them even sang songs and danced. There were still others who were interested in nothing, except picking shells.  

In short, everyone enjoyed the trip. In the evening, we returned home in our by bus, thinking of the fun we had had at that place. I enjoyed the trip so much.

 

 

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