As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. Do you agree or disagree
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Several people would claim that businesses should not only focus on making a profit but also take responsibility for the community. From my point of view, I strongly agree with the argument. 

There is no doubt to claim that the relationship between the development of businesses and the benefit of customers is bidirectional. It means that the attitude of customers plays a crucial role in the expansion of businesses, and the business could earn a large amount of money from the acceptance of customers. For example, the environment has been affected seriously recently because a large number of poisonous substances discharge into during the production of manufacturers. As a result, a strong wave of criticism against the products produced by these businesses has arisen so that their profits have decreased significantly only for a short time.

Based on the above argument, if the businesses only maximize their profits without any considerations about the environment in particular and the community in general, they would not survive in the globalization context. For example, the business should enhance the waste process technology to reduce their effect on the living condition of citizens as well as natural creatures. It leads to the progressively positive attitude from the customers - one of the most important factors to develop sustainably.

In conclusion, I would aver that while making money, the businesses should take care of the social issues as well. Once they gain an acceptance from the customers, they will become the champion in the fiercely competitive market.

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Theo mình thì make profit. 

the environment has been affected seriously recently 

câu này cần đổi lại vị trí của recently để cho nó mạch lạc hơn một chút.

discharge into - mình nghĩ chỗ này bạn thiếu object 

Claim chỗ này t thấy bạn viết 2 câu cuối không được rõ ý lắm. Mình nghĩ bạn nên nói là : Nếu doanh nghiệp không xử lý chất thải dẫn đến việc ô nhiễm mỗi trường thì uy tín của doanh nghiệp sẽ bị hạ thấp. Điều đó dẫn đến sự mất niềm tin từ phía người tiêu dùng, ảnh hưởng đến lợi nhuận. 

mình không hiểu chỗ waste process technology nhưng mình nghĩ ý bạn là waste solution symstems. 

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Mình cám ơn bạn Hương Ly nhé.
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Mình cám ơn các bạn nhiều :D

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