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Meaning of life.

As you might have known, we were born, we grew up, we lived and then we died. But have you ever made up your mind what would you do in order to change the same routine that other people have always been doing for this whole time? In short, you must realize what your meaning of life is, otherwise you is just going to be another grain of sand in the desert.

Firstly, what is the meaning of life? It is easily explained that you always want to achieve your dream that you have setted up, planned carefully from the very beginning of your first thought about it. Further, you can possibly realize it for many different purposes, for instance, it momentarily come across your mind and for any reasons, you just can not get rid of it out of your mind, and that's the strong push for further studying in it or the environment's condition (Your parents, friends,etc.) influences your curiosity why you exist. Next, what all of us should do to gain is to improve, rise  your determination, enterprise, soul inside you, etc. and try as much as possible, fail is necessary for us to learn from the past and look to the better future. Last but not least, life is not something you are just playing with, it is something you must respect, build, achieve to get it but sometimes take your time to relax and enjoy what you really have been doing all the times. And the most important, NEVER GIVE UP!

In the world today and ever after, Bill Gates and Jack Ma have lots of experience from the time being, that's why they are now famous because they know what they need to do, in short, they know what their life's meaning are . It also explains why they have so many philosophies that you should think all over about it from time to time.

From the point of my view, meaning of life is still very mysterious to all of us nowadays. But by the time passes and other environmental conditions such as education, family,etc. ,you and only you can know what your truly meaning of life is. So right now get up and have your mind on your near future, will you?  

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Chào bạn, bài này không theo dạng đề của IELTS, do đó chúng mình không thể chữa và gợi ý cho bạn theo format của IELTS được. Tuy nhiên, chúng mình có thể giúp bạn chữa lỗi grammar, và gợi ý một số cụm từ đồng nghĩa nếu bạn cung cấp cho chúng mình thêm thông tin về đề bài này (nhật kí, journal, formal, informal context?). Cảm ơn bạn.

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đã góp ý 14 Tháng 11 bởi Christine Ho (124 điểm)
Thank you, Christine Ho. I'm just a beginner so I'm not really sure what i am writing, I just write it on spur of the moment . And that explains why i don't write it correctly. Please forgive me for any mistakes I have made!!!
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As you might have known, we were born, we grew up, we lived and then we died. But have you ever made up your mind what would you do in order to change the same routine that other people have always been doing for this whole time? In short, you must realize what your meaning of life is, otherwise you is just going to be another grain of sand in the desert.

Firstly, what is the meaning of life? It is easily explained that you always want to achieve your dream that you have setted up, planned carefully from the very beginning of your first thought about it. Further, you can possibly realize it for many different purposes, for instance, it momentarily come across your mind and for any reasons, you just can not get rid of it out of your mind, and that's the strong push for further studying in it or the environment's condition (Your parents, friends,etc.) influences your curiosity why you exist. Next, what all of us should do to gain is to improve, rise  your determination, enterprise, soul inside you, etc. and try as much as possible, fail is necessary for us to learn from the past and look to the better future. Last but not least, life is not something you are just playing with, it is something you must respect, build, achieve to get it but sometimes take your time to relax and enjoy what you really have been doing all the times. And the most importanT. And the most important, NEVER GIVE UP! (spoken language)

In the world today and ever after,(should use "in this day and age") Bill Gates and Jack Ma have lots of experience from the time being, that's why they are now famous because they know what they need to do, in short, they know what their life's meaning (meanings) are . It also explains why they have so many philosophies that you should think all over(through) about it from time to time.

From the point of my view, meaning of life is still very mysterious to all of us nowadays. But by(as) the time passes and other environmental conditions such as education, family,etc. ,you and only you can know what your truly(true) meaning of life is. So right now get up and have your mind on your near future, will you?  (spoken language again)

 

 

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đã góp ý 15 Tháng 11 bởi nguyenminhkhai (22 điểm)

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