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Bài IELTS about many people these days travel far for work or spend more hours working. Does this trend have more advantages or disadvantages? What do you think about work-life balance?

     Long working hours is a widely used phrase these days when talking about competitiveness in work.Ling in such a severe working environment forces people to work harder and harder if they want too survive.When people spend more hours working,they get less time for themselves as well as relatives.This may not only lead to the disruption of families and personal relationships but also cause health problems.

    First and foremost,there is no proof that long working hours may improve your productivity in work.Instead of increasing it is one of main ways that decreases your own working productivity.For example,if you work in a long time without relaxing,you will have no energy left in you which may lead to your tiredness and even delay in finishing your own work.Therefore,in lieu of spending your whole time working ,you just need to use just a few hours working but with great concentration so you can find the effectiveness and enthusiasm that you are putting in your work and this is undoubtedly an effective way for you to enormously enhance your productivity.

   According to some surveys,a large number of people working in a long time continually are suffering from many epidemic like heart diseases or high blood pressure.Another problem this set up has effect on people's life is personal relationships and families's happiness.One undeniable thing is that when people use too much of their time on working they have little time to spend with their dear ones.This means they are day by day making their distance far from community and they are unintentionally separating them from everyone.Especially parents,who work long hours,they totally fail to take proper care of their offspring.When children are deprived of attention and considerate care they deserve,this will significantly affect their emotion.This can also have negative impact on their academic performance and thinking about parents.Parents,they now often hire a babysister to look after their children when they are away from home or they have little time to take care of their children,but they do not know that their children are vulnerable and the thing they need is not money,video games or sufficient facilities but their parent's care.This can also have bad concussion on their childhood.In typical cases,failure to strike a balance between work and life can lead to the breakup the many families.

     Overall,long working hours is not a good selection for those who want to boost their productivity but instead it makes you less productive.Besides you should find your own best way to balance between work and social life as well as personal relationships to have a better life.To put this into pratice,I think companies should facilitate their employees's time working by arranging suitable time so that they can have more time to spend with their family and for themselves.

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  Long working hours is a widely used phrase these days when talking about competitiveness in work.Ling in such a severe working environment forces people to work harder and harder if they want too survive.When people spend more hours working,they get less time for themselves as well as relatives.This may not only lead to the disruption of families and personal relationships but also cause health problems. 


    First and foremost, there is no proof that long working hours may improve your productivity in work.Instead of increasing it is(what) one of main ways that decreases your own working productivity.For example,if you work in a long time without relaxing,you will have no energy left in you which may lead to your tiredness and even delay in finishing your own work.Therefore,in lieu of spending your whole time working ,you just need to use just a few hours working but with great concentration so you can find the effectiveness and enthusiasm that you are putting in your work and this is undoubtedly an effective way for you to enormously enhance your productivity. 

   According to some surveys,a large number of people working in a long time continually are suffering from many epidemic like heart diseases or high blood pressure.Another problem this set up has effect on people's life is personal relationships and families's happiness.One undeniable thing is that when people use too much of their time on working, they have little time to spend with their dear ones.This means they are day by day making their distance far from community and they are unintentionally separating them from everyone.Especially parents,who work long hours,they totally fail to take proper care of their offspring.When children are deprived of attention and considerate care they deserve,this will significantly affect their emotion.This can also have negative impact on their academic performance and thinking about parents.Parents,they now often hire a babysister to look after their children when they are away from home or they have little time to take care of their children,but they do not know that their children are vulnerable and the thing they need is not money,video games or sufficient facilities but their parent's care.This can also have bad concussion on their childhood.In typical cases,failure to strike a balance between work and life can lead to the breakup the many families. 

     Overall,long working hours is not a good selection for those who want to boost their productivity but instead it makes you less productive.Besides you should find your own best way to balance between work and social life as well as personal relationships to have a better life.To put this into pratice,I think companies should facilitate their employees's time working by arranging suitable time so that they can have more time to spend with their family and for themselves.

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