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The Internet is proudly regarded as the standard symbol of modern times when it is prevalent in all fields. However, the Internet is easy to be misused itself and people start to complain that it should be controlled strictly by the authorities. Personally, I demand the same thing for some reasons.

 Firstly, there is exceeding number of unclassified contents which is in circulation. It is reported that people fail to find sufficient data, while, more seriously, they encounter foul information. For instance, my cousin, who is 11, was shocked by the horrific ghost movies after he typed “entertaining films” on Google. Therefore, online information should be categorized specifically so that kids like my cousin can save time and enjoy their films for children not for adults.

 Secondly, people nowadays criticize the lack of security for online users. Bitterly, virus has become cultural part of information technology as it lives along with Internet. Consequently, there is nothing but disappointment when huge losses of data and money are repeated daily. Information leakage is also worth mentioning since hackers make use of it to cause damage to the right of individuals. Again, governments should take actions to save us from being exposed to privacy hazard.

  From the opposite view, it is said that we only face problems if basic knowledge is not integrated effectively. It is clear that to use something we have to read the instruction first. However, the Internet is never something that is fully instructed because it is a wide range of open and complicated system which can be adjusted, updated and even reprogrammed. That we learn how to use it is just the tip of the iceberg.

 To sum up, there is always an urgent need to control the network due to its uncategorized data, deficiency in online protection and adjustable structure. In my opinion, Internet users, especially children, should equip themselves some essential skills to take advantage of such a contemporary breakthrough.
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Dear guy

I have some comments on your essay!

In my opinion, the structure of your essay is very clear and ideas are quite good. Therefore, I only wanna correct some mistakes of grammar and some words to be suitable for the contexts:

E.g: there is exceeding number of unclassified contents which are in circulation

- cause damage to the right ( should be privacy) of individuals.

 the Internet is never something that is fully instructed ( shoud be "is never smt fully instructed" because after smt we can use adjective)

 equip themselves with some essential skills 

Hope my opinions are helpful.

 

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Firstly, there is exceeding number of unclassified contents which is (are)in circulation. It is reported that people fail to find sufficient(appropriate )data

  From the opposite (opposing)view

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