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The best leisure activities

. Nowadays, teenagers havr many leisure activities such as: reading book, listening to music, watching television, playing sports and so on. However, i believe the best activity for teenagers is hanging out with our best friend and so do I. So why do we like it? Now I will account for hanging out with our best friend.

To begin with, hanging out with our friends helps us widen communication skills. For example, when we go for a walk in the park, supposing we meet the foreigners, will we do? Surely we will greet and talk to them. I think communicating with foreigners helps us widen communication skills.

Secondly, hanging out helps us recover more interesting entertainments. Of course, we can recover alone, no matter how happier if we hang out with our best friend.

Last but not least, hanging out with our best friend can save our beautiful moments. It helps us have a free photographer who readily takes a photo and edit for you to have a perfect picture. Besides that, our group gather to take a photo with many different posture. This is one of the collections which is very memorable for us after the trip.

To summarize, the best leisure activity is hanging out with our best friends beacause of several reasons such as: .... For me, I usually hang out with my best friend on weekends, They should spend more time on hanging out with our best friends.

 

 

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 Nowadays, teenagers havr many leisure activities such as: reading book, listening to music, watching television, playing sports and so on. However, i believe the best activity for teenagers is hanging out with our =>( their) best friend and so do I => (omit that). So ==> (informal) why do we like it? Now I will account for (the benefits that) hanging out with our best => (omit )friend has.

To begin with, hanging out with our friends helps us widen communication skills. For example, when we go for a walk in the park, supposing we meet the foreigners, will we do?===> (what will we do ? ) Surely we will greet and talk to them. I think communicating with foreigners helps us widen communication skills.

Secondly, hanging out helps us recover more interesting entertainments. Of course==>( omit), we can recover alone, no matter how happier if we hang out with our best friend.

Last but not least, hanging out with our best friend can save our beautiful moments. It helps us have a free photographer who readily takes a photo and edit for you to have a perfect picture. Besides that, our group gather to take a photo with many different posture. This is one of the collections which is very memorable for us after the trip.

To summarize, the best leisure activity is hanging out with our best friends beacause of several reasons such as: .... For me, I usually hang out with my best friend on weekends, They should spend more time on hanging out with our ===> (their) best friends.

 

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