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Some people say taxes should be spent on healthcare, others think more priorities should be invested in.

Some people say taxes should be spent on healthcare, others think more priorities should be invested in. Dicuss both sides and give your opinion.

 

People have different views about how goverments should allocate the state budget from the taxes. While some people argue that healthcare services are high on the list of priorities, in my opinion, every aspect of a society shares an equal role in public investment.

On the one hand, healthcare is of considerable importance in countries. Firstly, healthcare can contribute to a significant part of a country's economy. It is true that the return on the investment in the health industry plays an vital role in the national budget annually. Moreover, if the authority invest in healhcare, this will certainly create more jobs for the labour market as a whole, which is beneficial for economic growth in each country. Secondly, health care is conventionally regarded as an important determinant in promoting the general physical and mental health and well-being of people in countries. There is no doubt that countries with weak health and education conditions find it harder to achieve sustained growth.

On the other hand, other sectors such as education and technology are determining factors contributing for the prosperity of the country in my perspective. Education takes a significant role in national development because it is the best investment for the people in order to have well educated citizens. This will certainly facilitate people to have more opportunities to seek employment which gives them satisfaction and make a outstanding contribution for society. Furthermore, pouring national resources into technological sectors is crucial. It is apparent that modern technology is indispensable in the industrialized world since human labor is incomparable with that of machinery in term of efficiency. Thus, an emphasis should be placed on this area to benefit the overall growth of the economy.

 

In conclusion, although healthcare systems should be invested by government budget, I would argue that government sponsorship could allocate to other determinants. 

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People have different views about how goverments should allocate the state budget from the taxes. While some people argue that healthcare services are high on the list of priorities, in my opinion, every aspect of a society shares an equal role in public investment.

On the one hand, healthcare is of considerable importance in countries. Firstly, healthcare can contribute to a significant part of a country's economy. It is true that the return on the investment in the health industry plays an vital role in the national budget annually. Moreover, if the authority ==> authorities invest in healhcare, this will certainly create more jobs for the labour market as a whole, which is beneficial for economic growth in each country. Secondly, health care is conventionally regarded as an important determinant in promoting the general physical and mental health and==> as well as well-being of people in countries. There is no doubt that countries with weak health and education conditions===> with poor quality of education and health services find it harder to achieve sustained growth.

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In conclusion, although healthcare systems should be invested by government budget, I would argue that government sponsorship could==> should allocate to other determinants. 

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