It is true that an increasing number of children are required to spend much time on studying so they have less time for relaxing. In some countries, an increasing number of children are expected to spend long time studying in and after school. Despite the fact that it this offers some benefits, it there are also has several drawbacks.
On the one hand, there are many advantages of studying both in and after school. The main favorable factor is that children can potentially absorb a broad range of academic knowledge which might help them with future career. Admittedly, if juveniles youngsters did not spend enough time on learning subjects such as language, science, or technology, they could hardly secure jobs since most companies require their employees to be knowledgeable about at least one of these subjects. Another key benefit is that a growing population of intellectuals can contribute to the development of economy. Indeed, It is alleged commonly believed that the vast majority of students who study hard and have outstanding academic results would possibly work in different fields such as science or education. while those who are indolent seem to cope with financial difficulty or even commit crimes due to unemployment.
On the other hand, there are some negative impacts of studying too much on children that should be taken into consideration. Firstly, juveniles they would probably suffer from some psychological problems if they were forced to study all the time. Obviously, students can easily lose a sense of satisfaction when they have to learn much abstract knowledge. Instead of being excited, they usually feel stressed and depressed with much information. Furthermore, students need to be given more opportunities to develop practical skills such as communication skills because having only abstract knowledge cannot make prepare students become well-prepared for their future.
In conclusion, parents should not ask children to study both in and after school because its demerits outweigh its merits.
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