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Many students find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention at school. What are the reasons? What could be done?

It is true there have been more students find difficulty staying focused in a class in recent years. Given that distraction in school contributes to the bad performance of students, identifying the reasons behind this trend is key to find the solutions.

There are a number of reasons why students find it hard to pay attention at school. First, digital attraction have been a compelling culprit. As most students having digital devices with Internet access, such as smartphones, they are able to use these devices for activies urelated to learning during the class, such as texting, e-mailing and playing games, which prevents them from listenting to the teacher. Second, background noise level in a class also deteriorate children’s attention. Since the noise may come to the class from the outsides, such as construction sites, which is conducive to the increasing background noise level in classroom, students are not able to listen teacher voice clearly, which acts as an detterent for them to follow teacher’s instructions.

However, there are a great deal of solutions to cope with this problem. First, by banning using smartphones in class, students are not disturbed while they are attending the class. In fact, if they did not have to check their phones continuously, they would be able to catch up with the lesson. In addition, many improvements in class should be applied in order to reduce the level of background noise. By installing sound insulation materials, such as sound reducing-glass, the noise from outside is not able to get to the class, which provides students the quiet environment for learning.

In conclusion, using smartphones and the noise level in class can explain this phenomenon. By prohibit student from using digital devices during class and installing insulation material, students would be more focus in class.

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Fine , I appreciate this information. In modern world , have many aspects that affect the students mentality . this article shows that aspects. Children havin less attention in school activities.the very first cause is stirct curriculam. For example , One school term is comprised of various scientific, technological and mathematical progrmes.In this way no space for the other courses like paint , Art and Game.
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We are now standing in the 21st century which is an entertained period, it is true that there have been more increasingly particular students find difficulties  to stay staying focused in on a class in recent years. Consequently, poiting out negative distractions in school which contributes to the bad performance of students, accompany with identifying the reasons behind this pressing trend is are the fundamental key to find the solution cope with. (SHOULD ADD MORE LINKING WORDS)

 

There are a number of  enoimous range of reasons why students find it hard to pay attention at school. First and foremost, digital attraction has always been a compelling culprit, which has sparked students' fascinate. As most students have possess digital devices which includes Internet access and many other popular amused tools, such as smartphones they are able to use these devices for with the aim of being absorbed in activies which are un-related to learning schooling during the class, (such as) functioning as texting, e-mailing and playing games, which prevents them from (listenting to the teacher) complete acknowledgement the teachers' instruction. (SEPARATE THE LONG CONTENT INTO MORE PARAGRAPHS)

More to the point, background noise level in a class is also a remarkable contribution of deteriorating children’s (attention) consideration (SHOULDN'T REPEAT A WORD MANY TIMES). The noise ,which may come to the class from the outsides, such as made up of the working places-construction sites or playground and areas filled with crowd, is conducive to the increasing (THE PERFECT TENSE IS PREFERD THAN THE SIMPLE) has always affected to soar background noise level in classroom ,thus, (MORE LINKING WORDS, MORE FLUENCY) students are not cable to (listen teacher's voice clearly) ingest teacher's articulation in the clearest way, which acts as an detterent (for them) to follow strictly discipline leading an effetive result.

HoweverIn contrary (SHOULDN'T USE TOO COMMON WORDS), there are a great deal of solutions to cope with this thorny problem, among which the primary one is banning using (smartphones) state-of-the-art technology in class, hence, students will not be disturbed unworthily while they are attending the class. In fact, if weren't they did not to have to be directed to check their phones continuously (INVERSION IS MUCH BETTER), they would be able to catch up with the lesson. In addition, many constructive improvements in class should be applied in order to reduce (scale down) the (level) standard of (background noise) annoyed cacophony. By At the hand of installing sound insulation materials, such as sound reducing-glass, this effective recommendation which will restrains the noise coming from outside is not able to from approaching to the class, which along these lines, provides students enough peaceful environment to (learning) receive entire infomation through edcation.

 

In conclusion, over-using (smartphones) electronic devices with purpose of recreation and extreme noise (level) (REPEAT A WORD TOO MUCH) constant precipated by many factors and then blowing into class can are the main resonable answers to explain this phenomenon. As a result, if the decision of prohibiting student from handling digital equipments during class and furnishment with insulation materials was productively applied, students would be more focus convergent (TO BE + ADJ) to study more adequately at school.

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