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scientists predict that cá will be driven by computers, not people in the near future. why? do you think it is a positive or negative development ?

Most of people strongly believe that the computer driven cars will defeat the traditional ones which need drivers to operate. From my point of view, there are two main reasons for this, which will bring benefit more than harmfulness to those who sit on car.

First come the two primary causes of the movement trend. One is that software technology rapidly develops and appears on all aspects of life. If you randomly surf on some newspapers, there exists no difficult to find a news about technology initiatives that cover from agriculture to business. The other is that entire world is stepping into the new technology revolution which enable people switch from manual labor to high- technology production. Currently, we can work, study and relax without going to school, workplace, park ,… All things are possible thank to technology.

Then discuss about the benefits and drawbacks of this change. On the one hand, the new computer-driven system which is set up by fixed function do not ability to avoid surprise incidents, if it is out of the predictions of programmers. However, this is just a rare situation because before applying to the life, this system was experienced strict trials to ensure that operate smoothly and effectively. On the other hand, it brings a safer journey to those who are inside of car because the system is always accurate and quickly process problems. Besides, the drivers are sometimes drunk or losing their muster that they cannot focus on driving lead to accidents unfortunately. One additional supportive idea is that the driverless cars help the people save more money instead of paying it for drivers. It is brutally true that people spend large amount of that to hire a car driver so new system will help them to keep more money.

In a word, it is a indispensable trend that surely come to when the social and technology increasingly expand out of the people’s expectation. Anyway,  I can sure that it will bring the cos more than the pros.
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Mình góp ý tí nhé.

Nhìn chung, bạn đã biết áp dụng cách viết câu phức tạp. Nhưng bài bạn nhiều lỗi về hành văn như câu chưa đủ chủ ngữ - vị ngữ, lỗi mạo từ, v.v.

Most of people strongly believe that the computer driven cars will defeat the traditional ones which need drivers to operate.

-> Most of the people strongly believe that autonomous cars/computer-driven cars will defeat the traditional ones which need drivers to operate.

+ Then discuss about the benefits and drawbacks of this change. (câu này lủng củng, không đủ chủ ngữ - vị ngữ)

Không có cụm "to discuss about" bạn nhé. Cấu trúc đúng là: to discuss something.

Bạn có thể dùng cụm "discussion about"

It is brutally true that people spend large amount of that to hire a car driver 

Bạn dùng cụm "a large amout of + N không đếm được" nhé.

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