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ietls task 2: some people think that exercise is the key to heath while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important. Discuss

Health has been a matter of great controversies as different people enterain dissimilar opinions. While some hold a strong belief that doing exercise is necessary to have good health other show great interest that a balanced diet is avital factor.

First of all, the evident advantages of doing exercise are undeniable. As a matter of fact, exercise is improve physical strengh. There is growing evidence indicating that regular movement helps our body adapt to high level of exercise lead to become more durable. besides, an effective way of exercise to release stress. For example, studies have show that 80% of people who usually do morning exercise feel happier than other. Beyond any doubt, exercise is essential for healh.

Nonetheless, there are evident benefits of a healthy diet is a crucial. This can be seen in the obvious reality that a appropriate diet provide enough energy. As a result, it is able to cover all tasks in daily life without  feeling tired. Another merit of diet is observed in the fact that it can supply essential nutrients and minerals for body development. It is common knowledge that Vitamin A in fish is good for vission; Vitamin C in vegetable stimulates immunity; and iron and zink in beef are required to produce blood cells.

For the aforementioned reasons, it can be affirmed that each health care melhood has it own benefits and drawbacks.
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You should also express your opinion in the introduction. Because it require you to "Discuss both sides and give your opinion" not only discuss, and you'll get low score if you don't fulfill all the requirement.

While some hold a strong belief that doing exercise is necessary to have good health other show great interest that a balanced diet is avital factor. -> While some hold a strong belief that doing exercise is necessary to have good health, I believe having a balanced diet is more vital ( my example )

 

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