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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

Museums have by far become one of the major tourist attractions beside other fascinating holiday destinations over the last few years. However, while some museums charge visitors to get access, others are free for the public. In my perspective, the benefits of an entrance fee would surpass the drawbacks to some extents.

On the one hand, it is clear that government should encourage citizens for visiting museums due to the fact that everybody should be aware of their culture, customs and history. But high charge for admission to any museums would be the major issue to hinder visitors from exploring these beautiful buildings. Even local residents would spend an amount of money participating in other activities rather than discovering a location that they are too familiar. Therefore, collecting entrance fee in such places not only induce the reduction of tourist volume but also deprive of a chance to diffuse cultural and historical values of each region to domestic and international travelers.

On the other hand, I am side with the view that a charge for admission to museums should be applied to the public owing to several advantages that it might offer. First, not all museums are supported by governmental fund. The operation of a museum requires a huge budget to hire professional employees in order to provide tourists the best qualified services as well as to renovate the constructions or to restore artefacts and historical relics.... Besides, some special exhibitions taking place in museums often cost a great deal of money in terms of organization and advertisement. All of these activities are conducted in an attempt of attracting more tourists and also local residents to come. For these reasons, admission fee earned from the visitors would be an indispensable source of revenue for the maintenance and development of each museum.

In conclusion, despite the fact that entrance fee would attract fewer visitors in some cases, I highly believe that its merits overwhelms the demerits.

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In my perspective, the benefits of an entrance fee would surpass the drawbacks to some extents.

--> surpass its drawbacks in some extents

 

collecting entrance fee in such places not only induce the reduction of tourist volume but also deprive of a chance to diffuse cultural and historical values of each region to domestic and international travelers

--> Chủ ngữ lúc này là một cụm thì V theo sau chia ngôi thứ ba số ít --> induces ... deprives

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