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With the rapid advancement of communication technology, e.g. smart phones, tablets and other mobile phone devices, some people believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

     It is an undeniable fact that the rapid development of modern devices allow most people to communicate with each other in various methods. Despite some obvious drawbacks of this trend claimed by some individuals, I would argue that its merits are much more significant.

     To begin with, there are a variety of justified reasons from those who believe that the downsides of this trend are much more serious. Firstly, technological innovation is now so rapid that even the latest electronic devices soon become obsolete after a short period of time. This could put constant pressures on technology-oriented manufacturers in terms of developing brand new products, since they advertise their products as having the latest leading-edge technology on a frequent basis. Secondly, the availability of new communication technologies may also have the result of isolating people and discouraging real interaction. For instance, due to the allowance of using modern devices from parents without strict management, most teenagers have been addicted to those devices for an excessive amount of time. This could lead to deterioration in their health, including eye strain and being out of condition.

     However, I would argue that there are a wide range of beneficial impacts from the swift growth of modern technology. To be more specific, the digital revolution has fundamentally changed the way that numerous people work and even their ways of thinking. As a typical example, the brilliant invention of the micro-chip was a technical breakthrough that transformed the way in which people communicate. This would allow a huge number of people to work from home and explore endless possibilities for telecommuting industry as well. Another reason is that technology also plays a pivotal role in many enterprises and factories. Besides replacing the need of workers to do various labor-intensive jobs, it could help them maximize their profits and save a huge amount of money. Computerization in many factories, for example, has enabled them to produce goods more effectively, with the aid of proficient workers in sectors such as information technology and engineering.

     In conclusion, despite a few detrimental aspects of the fast improvement of technology with a wide variety of modern devices, I believe that the merits are more notable than its drawbacks.

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     It is an undeniable fact that the rapid development of modern devices allow most people to communicate with each other in various methods. Despite some obvious drawbacks of this trend claimed by some individuals, I would argue that its merits are much more significant.

     To begin with, there are a variety of justified reasons from those who believe that the downsides of this trend are much more (lặp lại cách dùng ờ đoạn trên→ even more) serious. Firstly, technological innovation is now so rapid that even the latest electronic devices soon become obsolete after a short period of time. This could put constant pressures on technology-oriented manufacturers in terms of developing brand new products, since they advertise their products as having the latest leading-edge technology on a frequent basis. Secondly, the availability of new communication technologies may also have the result of isolating people and discouraging real interaction. For instance, due to the allowance of using modern devices from parents without strict management, most teenagers have been addicted to those devices for an excessive amount of time. This could lead to deterioration in their health, including (→such as) eye strain and being out of condition.

     However, I would argue that there are a wide range of beneficial impacts from the swift growth of modern technology. To be more specific, the digital revolution has fundamentally changed the way that numerous people work and even their ways of thinking. As a typical example, the brilliant invention of the micro-chip was a technical breakthrough that transformed the way in ( →with vì communicate +with) which people communicate. This would allow a huge number of people to work from home and explore endless possibilities for telecommuting industry as well. Another reason is that technology also plays (→does also play)a pivotal role in many enterprises and factories. Besides, replacing the need of workers to do various labor-intensive jobs, it could help them maximize their profits and save a huge (→large) amount of money. Computerization in many factories, for example, has enabled them to produce goods more effectively, with the aid of proficient workers in sectors such as information technology and (→or) engineering.

     In conclusion (→To put it in a nutshell), despite a few detrimental aspects of the fast improvement of technology with a wide variety of modern devices, I still believe that the merits are more notable than its drawbacks.

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