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Ielts task 2 Test 2 Cam 1 - Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth and resources

It is often argued that developed countries are asked to help needy countries with foodstuffs and education, whilst others think governments of indigent countries must be responsible for taking care of their  residents on their own. This essay agrees that poor nations have to solve their problems alone and it will discuss both points of view.

On the one hand, rich nations should give poorer countries the support of sustenance and education. It is an necessary work to keep the balance of the world economy and show the humanity as well as international partnership, also. Despite this, it is just a temporary solution to make a significant change for a long time and even creates dependence for developing countries. Consequently, this essay disagrees that wealthy nations have to do something for help. For instance, if essencial needs for living of people such as eating and learning are almost solved by oversea aid, some unemployed people will abuse the welfare system by not even trying to find a job.

On the other hand, it’s clear that administrations of destitute nations play the most important role to look after their citizens only by their own hand. They can individually manage and decide aspects of their countries as well as avoiding risks when receiving help from the others. It is therefore agreed that the governments must independently solve issues of their countries. For example, when the richer country carries out a relief plan, they also want to control the regimes of the poor country, which may have subsequently brought the catastrophic effects.

In conclusion, while wealthy nations are demanded to do something to help indigent ones overcome underdevelped circumstance, some still feel that developing countries should do this alone with the leadership of their governments. However, to keep away from worthless sorrows, citizens of poor nations should make efforts along with their administrations to break away hardships themselves.
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Bị sai chính tả kìa bạn, dòng thứ 2 đó. Bài viết khá ok rồi, theo bố cục nhưng cần điểm thêm một vài từ hay vào để kiếm điểm. như câu này nghe nó cứ bị ngược này: On the one hand, rich nations should give poorer countries the support of sustenance and education nên sửa lại là On the one hand, rich nations should give the support of sustenance and education to poorer countries

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